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It's Hard To Believe

Your smile is
Infectious
And I really can't believe
That I'm the reason
It plays across your face

Your love is
Undescribable
It's what makes me wonder
Why my reality seems to be
Better than my dreams

Your presence is
Amazing
And it's hard to believe
That it's your hand
Holding mine

What we have is
Perfect
I can't stop smiling
It seems way too good
And way too real to last

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Written June 30th, 2005

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  • Sedated Affection
    March 21, 2007

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    Sweet

    It's one of those sickeningly cute couples that everyone hates but secretly wants to be a part of... good job... comment on one of mine please

  • V a n i t y
    April 15, 2006
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    Clever. Good.

    Smells like burning fuel in here, right now. But back to the poem... yeah, nice. I could say short and sweet, but that would be borderline cliche and far too vague to be critical and yet remain diplomatic.

    I like the structure, and you did avoid the cliche of the whole "dreams" thing by knocking it out that the reality was better. that, i think, sold me on the entire thing.

    well done, my friend.

  • Babyblonde
    July 21, 2005
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    hey awesome poem, so sweet, ur an awesome writer!


  • FullyAlive
    July 12, 2005
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    i like this... jenn, this is great...
    uh,mmmm, i wish i could write about happiness... but i cant
    so ill read it instead, and tell the people who wrote it how i envy them and how i can relate...

    great job... keeep writing... fetuses will rule the world... mmmkay???

    -bexa-


  • legendd
    July 7, 2005
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    i wish i could relate to this one... this is good. i like the formatting! its really good... great write.
    sara


  • Piece 2 My Puzzle
    July 4, 2005
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    aww this is cute...nicely written....best of wishes-chrissy


  • loSt in uR eYez
    July 1, 2005
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    You make things that everyone seems to write about so much better. I dont know how to explain it, but great write Jenn. Of course another favorite to add to my list. Looks like Your happy again! WOOHOO!!
    <3kay

  • rotting soul
    July 1, 2005
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    wonderful. you always were good at this.. keep it up shawty.


  • im-a-sparkley -elf
    July 1, 2005
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    wow. i feel the exact same way. really sounds like something i'd write...except it wouldnt come out as nicely as yours. awesome blossom! <3333

  • xOxO15
    July 1, 2005
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    this is a really sweet poem ...good job


  • July 1, 2005
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    Great write, it's straight to the point and well written very nice work.

  • TinkerBell15
    June 30, 2005
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    this is how i feel bout muh bf & i........i love it keep the good work up
    ~*~*~Ashley~*~*~


  • LaAmyaArlene
    June 30, 2005
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    Awe, this is amazing hehe


  • Boe
    June 30, 2005
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    This is so sweet Jenn. Very cute poem. I'm glad to read that your happy again. Take care hun!

    ~Cherie

  • IhopeUchokeNdie
    June 30, 2005
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    Sweetness! Yep I'm hyper but, I really like this. It's like the perfect description of a new, true love. You know, the kind you know will last forever. So sweet. Great job, keep writin'!
    ~lil princess~

  • Im Spiffy
    June 30, 2005
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    i like it its strait to the point and thats why i like it. really good. i used to have a person who made me feel that way. but the bad news is that he moved to nevada. so that kinda sucks.

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