I’ve stopped fighting it.
It’s storming now
and you’re threatening to go out there
in the rain.
and maybe get struck by lightening.
Are you expecting me to stop you?
You want me to believe that
everything you’ve done
was just to make me happy
and this has hurt you more
than I could possibly know.
Yeah, you’re so fucking tortured.
Your head is in your hands
as you cry for effect.
I sit here smoking,
trying to bore holes
through your skull with my stare.
Really, dear, must this be so dramatic?
You did this.
You created this scenario.
You ended this romance.
And yet, you expect absolution
and a sympathetic hug.
But I’m no fucking priest,
and you are not forgiven.
Author notes
This is somewhat fictional, although I have placed it in my collection The Andres Poems. The anger from that situation- read other andres poems for more on that- is still there, nearly 10 years later. I was struck by a rather cynical mood reading the rules for this contest... hope you enjoy it. I also created the background to further enhance the poem 
Written June 29th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Don't Tear Out My Heart, if you Can't Put It Back by DanielleFace.
500 points, ended January 8, 2007, 53 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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the background complements well, the poem is great, the last line is my fav
-lys
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I thought this was amazing. I loved it.
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I like thiss. alot alot.
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Thanks for entering my contest- I really appreciate it! I like the emotion in this piece, the anger runs deep. Great job at that. Keep on writing, you do a good job!
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I haven't smoked in years. And even when I did, I was a casual smoker- it usually took me two weeks to get through one pack.
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This is very well written, and I'm not going to take it out- even though the f-word is one of my least favourite words. It fits with the anger. Good luck! (Oh ya, and I hope you quit smoking.. it's gross and will kill you slowly and painfully. It sucks, I've seen it happen.)
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thought inducing poem. I like the exploration of the x-lover...
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I'm very glad to not be on your bad side. Again, your ability to be vivid from thought to expression and feeling is very powerful.
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I lke the cynical tone in this poem as well, the cussing helps when you are venting I guess, the puffing helps to create a certain character say toughy. ckae
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when a love is ended...it cannot be explained away...nor should it.....good work....brian...
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i love it, amazing. this contest is going to be so hard to judge, thanks for entering, keep up the great work, and good luck!
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hey this poem is very good i love it!!!!!!
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somewhat fictional or not it hard a wonderful, powerful voice and was very entertaining to read. -ryn
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I liked this, I loved what you were thinking in the italics, no matter what people might say, there is nothing wrong with cynicism, it makes life more interesting.
~Laila~
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