She whispers a curse
of magical verse,
that seems so like a song.
Although you may know
the ones who do so,
their words can never be wrong
And through the years
no one hears
her tears of lonely pain
A heartless thought
of selfish rot,
that drove the world insane.
Author notes
This is my first (and only) dark/angst poem. I did the first choice. This poem is my property. Yelk.
Written June 29th, 2005
A contest entry
- Summer Extranveganza by tapballet.
350 points, ended July 4, 2005, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awesome!
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hey ally..it's debbie<3..this is a good poem! i rlly like the third stanza b/c it has a subtle but still pronounced depth. The feeling in this poem is quite alive.
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i have to comment this again, because i liked this poem of yours the best =)
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AWESOME
Wow! That was an AWESOME poem! I'm in the group Flouresent Shrimp too! I loved your poem. Keep it up! -
Wow this is really cool!
I love the ending, it's a very flattering end to a beautiful strung together poem. Creative rhyming, me like it lots
Damn, you should be proud! -
ally...u rock !!!!!! soooo good! i loved it! byeeeeee
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Nice, I liked the different rhyme scheme. Well, nice job again! Your score will be a lovely 75.
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A Mystical, magical, mantle; well done brava!
A wonderfull rolling rhyme ... very well done
There is magic in the depth "She whispers a curse
of magical verse,
that seems so like a song." A wonderful mystical magical mantle Excellent well done
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