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Blue and Red China



His was blue

 




Mine is red

 




He's was delicate

 




Lilies spilled

 




Like grace onto

 




The white porcelain.

 




 




Mine was harsh

 




And loud

 




Scattered symbols

 




And leaves thrashed

 




About my white surface.

 

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Written June 28th, 2005

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  • Spork the Mighty
    June 29, 2005
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    I don't know what it meant, but I'm sure it was dirty! Just messin' sis'er. You need to IM me.


  • The CheshireKat
    June 29, 2005
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    do i detect lament?

  • DaNi-3LL3
    June 29, 2005
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    i didnt really get that poem, but it had good intentions

    luv gyps


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 29, 2005
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    A very lovely and interesting concept you've applied here! China....coffee mugs or plates...you created such vivid images from something so "ordinary" - wonderful work. It's been way too long since I've read your deep and thought-provoking poetry and what a pleasure to read this one. So many layers to this poem....maybe a metaphor for your personalities as well. A very unique poem!

    ~ Nicolette


  • Whispers79
    June 28, 2005
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    This is interesting & unique....job very well done...thanks so much for sharing!

    Tisha


  • bethany may
    June 28, 2005
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    this is very interesting and I honestly have no idea what it was about...only the title really gives the clue...but then I still don't really get it..maybe I'm stupid keep writing...Luv Caz

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