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Drowning in frustration

I'm drowning helplessly in my frustration,
with no hope of ever being saved.
one is the childhood from which
i have been depraved.

My mind blocks my reason,
so who's to know if i commit treason,
but to myself.

I've been depriving myself of what
i truly deserve,
apparently i took a
wrong turn,
and somewhere along the way,
my frustrations caught up with me
and finished off the little happiness i had.







 

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Written June 28th, 2005

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  • Jackspoetry4u
    October 26, 2006
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    I loved this it was a true honor for me to read as i felt every word as if it were coming from my own heart truly a wonderful write thank you so much for sharing this with those of us here

  • Peachycutie
    July 20, 2005
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    very nice piece, so emotional and feeling is wonderful. Keep up the good work!


  • kkatie55
    July 20, 2005
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    Excellent

    frusration I felt ...torn of happiness is sad ...I didn't like the part about treason it seemed forced rhyme...but the rest was excellent...happy writtings


  • Hidden Fortress
    July 20, 2005
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    I feel this... I totally understand... I feel the same as you... Just to be understood... I love this poem... it's beautiful... It flows well and I enjoyed it so much... I think I'll read it again!


  • jeanimoo
    July 20, 2005
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    Oooops I forgot to applaud, so here it it

  • jeanimoo
    July 20, 2005
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    This is really good!! Such emotion you have as you do have away with words


  • EsotericCure
    July 20, 2005
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    i also expected this to be a bit longer, but it does get the point across. i get the feeling of confusion and misery, and if thats what you were writing about, you portrated it very well. you have good descriptions, and good rythym! Nice write!


  • LionessK silver member
    July 20, 2005
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    Wow..there is so much emotion in these words..I could feel your frustration. I have known the feeling myself. You really express yourself wonderfully through poetry, I hope you will keep writing and sharing your emotions here with us all...
    excellent work!

    ~Kristy


  • sky black
    June 29, 2005
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    oo my, someone isnt a happy bunny. nice write though, hope everyhting is ok for you and it works out good. i expected this to be a little longer, but hey at the end of the day tis your poem! l8az take care sky xxxx

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