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Hummingbird (Cinquain)

 


 

 

Flitting,

 

Buzzing around,

 

Darting among the blooms,

 

A blur, suspended motionless

 

In air.


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Written June 28th, 2005

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  • Elrenia
    June 28, 2005
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    Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it very much. And I am glad you enjoyed it.


  • ionabus
    June 28, 2005
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    What a fantastic cinquain. I think it is just phrased perfectly. Good job

  • Elrenia
    June 28, 2005
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    Thank you! That is what prompted this. I am doing a series of nature cinquains. I am amazed at what there is to write about, in just the little things people overlook. You can find them in my Butterfly Songs list. Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment. I appreciate it very much.


  • Captivated Lioness gold member
    June 28, 2005
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    Lovely cinquain! I saw one this last weekend too. Thus is a really short form -- I have tried haiku, but not these yet.