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Sad Sad Teen Angst Whine Waah Waah Angry Bloody Poem #16113

 

I am special, I am cool
I am certainly no one's fool

I am me, I am unique
I am better than your clique

My whole life, it's so biopic
I buy all my clothes at Hot Topic

And even though they bought them for me
My parents do  nothing but ignore me

Their eighteen bucks got me that Korn shirt
That studded belt, that way-too-short skirt

I am dark, I am so black, you are so fake
You can tell by my dark clothes, make no mistake

In fact, all these posers are so suffocating me
That I'm gonna go whine about it on AllPoetry!

"I want dark, I want cutting, I want abuse"
It isn't cool unless it leaves a bruise

In fact, write me a poem about it all
I'll check it later...I'm still at the mall

I was gonna go cut, was gonna go bleed
But instead I had to indulge in hypocritical greed

Razors, scissors, knives, blood
Can't let people know I'm a dud

Gimme gimme, gimme your hate
Give me anger, give me irate

Tell me how cutting is how your life ends
So I can feed this BS back to my dumb "Gothic" friends

We're only "Gothic" because we memorized all the moves
And because Hot Topic and Marilyn Manson approve

So yeah, I doubt I deserve the first place prize
But at least, after reading this poem, you might just realize

That this is all fake. This is all old.
The same old tactics got the hippies sold

Your parents thought they were as rebellious as you
They thought their way of thinking was just as few

They were the "Goths" fighting the "Jocks"
They were always getting bullied, lived the hard knocks

They got the tattoos, the piercings, the fashion
And for them too their music was their last bastion

But they were as arrogant too, know it or not
They thought that they were the cream of the crop

Just like you, admit it, you know it
No one's your friend unless their fashion can show it

So grow up, wipe off that fake frown
Stop looking up the latest way to look "down"

Because hey, I agree with the philosophy
And go ahead and call me a reg'lar ol' softy

I'm sure I'm just a poser, a bullying fake
No way could I understand your deepness (give me a break)

I get it, I got it, I went through the phase
Spending mom 'n pops cash on CD's for days and days

But "Goth" is just silly, its' an utterly fake teen-angst diatribe
(seeing as "Gothic" is only for architecture and that Rome-era tribe)

So go ahead, just write me off
As just another wannabe-prep jackoff

But at the same time, look around you
Maybe people who think your way aren't so few?

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Written June 27th, 2005

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  • UpsideDownFrown
    September 7, 2005
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    Glad ya enjoyed


  • ShesXsoXinXlove
    September 7, 2005
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    Ohh my gosh this s sooo true, i dont consider myself "goth" or whatever but i hate preps who try to be "goth" and cut in thebathrooms at school, its so idiotic. err those people get me madd! rawr teehee now i'm getting off subject, but what im trying to say is this is great!!!!!!!!!


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 1, 2005
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    This is simply outstanding! Talk about telling it like it is! You are so right. I did the hippy/flowerchild thing and the tatoo thing and the drug and alcohol thing....now I do the Jesus thing!
    This is not only humorous, but very well thought out and well-written. You may have more "real" insight to people than you know or others are willing to give you credit for. If you don't mind, I am going to add you to my fav's and print a copy of this. Kudos for a job well done. I hope this won you a gold trophy! ~Frog~


  • josh-13
    September 1, 2005
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    Awesome, awesome, I was cracking up reading this. lol I loved this poem it was great and holds so many strong points. I absolutly loved it. It was an amazing yet ironicly funnie write.

  • UpsideDownFrown
    September 1, 2005
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    Thanks!


  • Lovely Luci
    September 1, 2005
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    Bravo

    This is pretty darn good. I don't really consider myself a goth, or madly in love with the whole death thing, but my poetry for some reason is best when it's dark. Also, I don't think I've ever done a piece that was deep in whine or had to do with cutting. Anywho, pretty good piece and best of luck in the contest.

    With a sword of hope and a pen of darkness,

    Sir Dakkon


  • aslanlight
    August 31, 2005
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    Heheheheheh I love it!!!
    With me it was punk till I became a hippy now I'm a christian, yeah I'll stay like this. I reckon Jesus was the original punk, hippy, goth, drop out, freak..... and no-one has ever done it better, no-one can touch that!!!
    A thoughroughly entertaining, fascinating write and full of wisdom and truth.


  • -faerie-
    July 15, 2005
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    This is an awesome poem, great show of emotions, but i dont see how this fits in with the topic of my contest, (dragonfly, moth or faerie) ...

  • Jumbie
    July 13, 2005
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    Very true.

    The preps at my school think it's cool to cut their wrists in the school bathrooms. The teachers know, just don't do anything.
    Edited on Jul 13, 10:03 p.m. because ''.

  • UpsideDownFrown
    July 13, 2005
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    Thanks!

  • UpsideDownFrown
    July 13, 2005
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    thanks

  • UpsideDownFrown
    July 13, 2005
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    thanks!

  • Bob the Elder
    July 13, 2005
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    i don't know.... it can be hard to change the way things are in your head, even if you know that what's there is stupid... or whatever. really most people are living in a lie but maybe they should just be left to it... like you said, its what everyone does, parents generation included. but yeh this was a great write, a point very well made. rhyme worked well. clever use of words. although the people this is commenting on... (great line: "No way could I understand your deepness") well they are so convinced of themselves, how right they are. this is gonna be kinda wasted. but yeh great comment you're making here.


  • Jamais Oublier
    July 13, 2005
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    wow this was great. for how long it is i loved it. keep up the great work and good luck in the contest! i like how you just ranted on about things. it was hilarious. the rhyming and shit. it was awesome.

    ~dust~


  • Indifference
    July 6, 2005
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    TRUE, DAT, YO

    This is indeed the truth. Endless sorrow, cutting, and death are indeed the new black
    This poem does show the hollowness of it all in a wonderful way. You won't win, but I'm glad your message is out there in this contest. You SHOULD win, because your write is perhaps the light shining in on the dark!

  • Bloody Dawn
    July 4, 2005
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    THE TRUTH

    i really like this one
    "goth" and "death" is the fashion today. Our generation lives off tragedy. We need it. Its like a drug for us so that we can tell other people how hard our life is and they could never understand...VERY well written. It exposes the truth in a rawhide way


  • robert bolin
    July 3, 2005
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    To me this poem is out there but its good and long great good luck..

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