with arms outstretched
longing to feel
the your shackles
filled with love and promises
to enslave me
wanting to feel you
move through me
invading every thought
and emotion
making us feel as
one even when apart
tethered to me
enjoying the feel of
your mark upon me
one that goes unnoticed
by the naked eye
only I'm aware
collar me
lying here bound,
tethered, and collared
allowing you complete access
to all parts of me
trusting you
that no harm will come
you pleasure me
to you I run when
the cruelty of life hits
with tender fingertips
you wipe the tears away
whispering comforting words
into my ear
protecting me
all I ask is that
you never violate my trust
and take not of things
I do not offer willingly
this is the only thing
I'll ever request of you
respect me
on this I day
freely I make the choice
to be yours
holding nothing back
so please, love me
A contest entry
- by l......
300 points, ended August 11, 2005, 49 entries
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First things first, I love that picture! Umm, it's a good start, it just need to be worked some more. It seems like it's only living up to half of it's potential. We all do this from time to time, write a poem out of nowhere and just put up with out really editing it or thinking of how it could be polished into a gleaming glittering thing that demands to be looked at and understood. -
I liked this, but for me personally, it was a bit long.
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This poem is truly full of passion and love. I adore your beautiful poem. Keep it up! Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!
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I thought that this was a great write, often times do we put ourselves on the line. We placed every thing out there laid perfectly on the shelf for someone we love to come by and shattered it, but trusting they wont. That they will take pride in us and love us with the same emotions we have for them. I thought that this was a very honest and pure emotional write towards the person you care immensely about. And I hope to read more from you soon. Feel free to check out any of my writings, I would really appreciate it. Keep writing hun, -Heather
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I really like how in a single poem, you request "enslave me" as well as "protect me" and yet it fits somehow, the way you've worded and grouped everything. Nicely done.
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Very nicley done. It was very well written. It was creative and very well descriptive too. Good job. Keep on writting. Again it was a great peice of writting.
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Wow!!! I really liked this, very creative and descriptive. This was written very well and I really enjoyed reading this. I am glad you shared this. Great!!!
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This poem is full of images that ramped through your mind
While you read each and every line every word spoken is well defined bringing out the truth for the eyes of the blind
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i am completely amazed by your talent, it says so many things that i have wanted to say but couldn't because you said it for me, i am just in awe of your ability to express your feelings. this is a great piece, i hope to see more from you soon
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This is how I feel....about a certain person in my life.....wow...it has it down to the finest detail of how I feel...this is a truly amazing poem....keep up the great work....
much love,
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The title catches the eye. And its true, most people are very willing to fall in love, and then there are those strange few who hate being in love. And the mark that goes unseen by the naked eye, very true. lovers leave marks on you that only you can really see and feel. And trusting them to not take advantage of you. Thats a hard one for me, but you really seem to trust your guy so thats a good thing! Very seductive and romantic poem! Wonderful work, keep writting!
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This is a Very good poem. i really liked it. this is a very romantic poem and sexy at the same time.. great peice.. enjoyed reading it.. hope to see more.. and keep writing you a very great writer i like ur style.. keep up the GREAT work.
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nice poem. i liked the last line of each stanza
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The person that comes into your life and makes you feel safe, loved, and wanted is definitely a keeper.
And about those "marks" that they leave. Dirty little reminders of the fun before ^_~ -
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This is lovely I really like it hee hee. You kept the theme of two word stanza endings, you didn't put in capilizations that made no sense (people that use lowercase tend too..) the line length followed a pattern and it had no akward points to speak of. I don't have anything to say on the content say I really did like it (i rarely say anything more unless i hate it hee hee) at any rate an all-around good write.
Ta-Ta,
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enchanting
a very seductive and romantic poem. I dont know how to say this, and it is not a comment on the poetry itself. But the 2nd last stanza seemed to back away from the power the rest. Almost as if the poet was afraid to write such a poem without disclaimer. Such as it is, the stanza is written in the same flowing and enchanting way as the rest of the poem. -
I really love this poem. It is very powerful and so full of emotion. This is a really wonderful poem. Take care and keep up the wonderful work!
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this is an amazing....breathtaking piece of work. It embodies everything I want from my D/s relationship...and in such a beautiful way. This definitely gets an applause.
~Chelsea -
This is a most interesting poem. I really like the way it moves from physical submision to a desire for love, respect and tenderness. A most impressive piece of writing. I lookforward to reading more of your work. Chris.
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Excellent
Powerful..Written so well..Excellent!
Betty -
Wow, this is an excellent write full of great emotion. Very very powerful! The picture is beautiful as well! This is an excellent job with great flow and word choice! I really enoyed it!
Molly -
When the heart sense an emptiness or a need from within, there are so many sensations we want to fill it up with and to explore and enjoy. Most are just head thoughts and hold no realistic value, usually because one or both parties involved have no clue as to how to bring that inner expression into fruition, but still... we yearn. Nice job here SweetNSassy.
♥ Kimberly -
oh my another wonderful hart felt write that stimulates the readers understanding and heart nice job and you have great pics another one is lifted
love and light
blaze
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