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Boredom


Boredom-
an Idle mind,
with a restless body;
Frustrations building up
Irksome


Author notes

done watching a particularly bored friend of mine...
Written June 27th, 2005

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  • laya
    June 30, 2005
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    inspiring

    gud write.i wud'v made the last line- insipid/ lifeless.
    lkfwd to the write with the title- flow/ abundance/ achievment
    meaning thats what i wish.


  • estelm4
    June 29, 2005
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    the syllable count in the 2nd line is supposed to be 4, and an idle mind has four syllables...

  • ankuraa
    June 28, 2005
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    y r u so bored dear?
    there's so much for u to do.
    anyway... i loved the cinquain.
    The syllable count on the second line is 3...
    still nice