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Life Lived Alone



Damned to wallow in eternal darkness

Abandoned and forgotten by a mother so heartless

I hid myself away to escape a world so cruel and shallow

My face hidden from even a candle's soft glow

And then, I met an angel, for what else could she be?

An angel with bright eyes and a heart full of purity

Her voice awoke the light inside

Brought to life a part of me that I thought had died

In the shadows I watched her every move

I taught her to sing and watched her improve

The fools of my opera could only watch in awe

Her voice even more beautiful than that of our famous Carlotta

She sang beautifully to a full house that night

On stage she was a magnificent sight

I knew then that she had to be mine

I enchanted her with soft songs in her mind

Even as she slept, I sang to her in dreams

But I never foresaw that young fashion-slave could ruin my scheme

To the women it seemed that his face was divine

And really, what woman would want a face as hideous as mine?

That boy, more child than man, took away my love, my Christine

Now, I've returned to the darkness, never again to be seen

I have finally lost the will to fight

Never again shall I make the music of the night

Author notes

I love the phantom!
Written June 26th, 2005

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  • Padfoot-Black
    July 1, 2005
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    I commented on devArt but *sighs* for you I comment here too . I luv this very much, Lily. This one line might need a bit of tweaking though:

    Her voice even more beautiful than that of our famous Carlotta

    Maybe:Her voice, more beautiful than that of La Carlotta.

    *shrugs*I dunno. That line just seemed to nudge the flow a bit. Great write!

  • RoCKnRoLL3352
    June 30, 2005
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    I really really liked it. I saw the movie and you hit all the points. i loved that poem. good luck in the contest. this is the best one ive read so far.


  • purpleinhereyes
    June 30, 2005
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    This was brilliant. You stuck to the Broadway story and I love you used both Christine and Calotta's name. BRAVISSIMO!!


  • suppressiveangel
    June 29, 2005
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    Great

    This is wonderful! These facts are so true, considering the music of the night was the song he went out with on the Broadway musical production. I love it, good luck! Please continue writing and have a wonderful day!