the truth is crystal:
we are like small tiles
precisely spaced on the floor
with our clean lines
and our sharp corners
separated, isolated
from what is real.
there's an imaginary wall
lying between us
and our reality,
a vague existence;
here i am
screaming in this square--
separated entirely,
but you have yet
to hear my voice.
so take a superficial snapshot
to place your thoughts
and tell you what to say
or how to feel,
since you could never
find the words.
the line has been drawn
to your boxed-in reality
a simple point
connecting four segments
of isolation and exclusion.
do you miss what it is you lack?
you can have your box
and your lines
or that fake, super-glued smile;
and sell your heart
to someone who cares.
it's time to face the truth
and i'm tired of trying
to tear down these walls.
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Written June 26th, 2005
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Very powerful write tinged with anger. You know, too many people live their lives worrying more about the way things look than the way things really are. I loved the ending of this. People always talk about living or looking outside of the box, this poem expresses that like nothing else I have read. Great job here, keep up the good work.
Be Well and Be Blessed
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i love it, no one wants to be part of conformity, this was the most fabulous part;
so take a superficial snapshot
to place your thoughts
and tell you what to say
or how to feel,
since you could never
find the words.
wow, awesome work. -
That is one of my favorite new poems now. It was....wonderful.
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A little hard to read, but very strong and emotional.... I loved it and I hope it gets the point acrossed to whom it is about!
do you miss what it is you lack?
you can have your box
and your lines
or that fake, super-glued smile;
and sell your heart
to someone who cares.
Those lines are very strong and powerful in meaning... Amazingly written...KIKI
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Nice write, and I understand the reason for the background (which is very neat, by the way) but it's a tad bit hard to read with it. I had to highlight it to read it. But it's a great write with a great concept, I really enjoyed the read.
Bestest of wishes & all that other mushy, gushy stuff
~Meli~
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Oh what a powerful ending! Great poem, very steady and had a definite rhythm.
'you can have your box
and your lines
or that fake, super-glued smile;'
And your meaning and imagery was fantastic! A very well exicuted, calculating delight! Thx for sharing!
X0X0X0X <3 Hastings -
Oh I like this! Very deep! The background makes it a bit hard to read though.
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this was a great poem, it really was, it just makes me a little sad.
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