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Pick Your Own


 

                        


One man beneath one old straw hat, alone – while berries bloom
genetics picked and bees brought in while patiently he grooms
sixty acres filled with pride, each bush this artist’s joy
now brushed against by buzzing wings as nectars are enjoyed.

Two hundred seeds these bees do feed with pollen laden rumps
so slowly, slowly green to puce each grows a bit more plump
Sun rays warm the fruit to rise, his fingers pluck full grown
He savors his blue prize of life and signs it  –“pick your own”.


     


 

I rose in the dark, and drove twenty miles, anxious to savor the first of this year’s crop.  No other cars yet . Great, I shall be the first. In the quiet of the sunrise, I sought out the only person around.  "No," the new farmer explained, as he put down his paint brush, "the longer winter means we won’t pick for another two weeks." With both of us, with time to kill, we walked the fields. I talked of the years I had picked here when the Ryan’s owned the farm.  He’d bought it five years ago, but before that he’d worked in Manhattan for thirty years, as he put it, 'saving enough to be able to lose it all in farming here - far from the beaten path.' Since then he tended the soil, blended the varieties, tested out the benefits of different bees, fought disease and learned the value of feather dust.   This would be his first crop.  Finally his lifelong dream was bearing fruit – or at least it would in two weeks.   I blushed at my impatience.

I couldn’t help but notice the color variations on each cluster of fruit as we passed – green, pink, puce.   He pointed out examples of berry cup, a disease that shrivels the fruit.  I noted the plastic bee hives. “ Local bees are lazy. Each berry has 200 seeds,” he explained. The harder the bees work, the more seeds get pollinated. The more seeds get pollinated, the bigger the berries.  Twenty thousand plants, 60 acres, 200 varieties.  "$1300 just on honey bees alone – three kinds” he says. " These we bring in from West Virginia.” I laughed to myself considering this new form of migrant worker and thought, “ I guess, if he can work for 35 years, I can wait two more weeks”.


As we grew quiet, he pulled back a branch, offering me first pick.  I savored that single berry like none other – watched in slow motion as he savored his, then we headed back.  He to his proverbial sign in the barn and me to my ride home all the while considering the wisdom in those words  that said more of his life than his fruit – Pick Your Own. 


 


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Written June 26th, 2005

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  • agazeley gold member
    April 6, 2006
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    Wonderfully written, arranged, and commented on – I haven’t a clue how you can arrange two pictures on a page like this, very effective and graphical – I seems that as well as being a very talented writer you are also quite a talented computer person . . .

    Like the man beneath the old straw hat, I also have a 60 acre fruit farm (but in the UK ) that I love and miss very much – and sadly I rarely get to walk it I’m afraid. But it is the subject of many of my poems. . . Albert.

  • oneluckygirl
    June 28, 2005
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    I am as tickled with your words as by the reward. I wasn't sure at all that this one would touch anyone beyond the fool who wrote it and am so pleased this man's story shines through.

    Thank you for giving it a home.
    Jane


  • forgotten dream
    June 28, 2005
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    wow. this is amazing.
    i love the refreshing structure this took on - first a short poem, and then a short-story following. they tie in so well together, and you really have an incredible way with words. i loved every moment of this, and the sweetness, the beauty in your words. a brilliant, masterful piece of work. thank you so much for entering and best of luck in the contest <3

  • oneluckygirl
    June 28, 2005
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    Well, my darling grumplepuss, the passion of the man for all the bumps along the road made the act of his sharing all that much sweeter. Perhaps for him, the journey was the joy - but I'd hardly enjoy a warm tart of feather dust and fertilizer.

    a herd of hungry grockles...
    Don't think I'd want them near me either - at least not without my wide brimmed hat.

    Your ruminations are delicious, by the way.
    J


  • silica silver member
    June 28, 2005
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    Good poem well worded and observed… but¡!

    I don’t know if you have ever seen the Thelwell cartoon of the young ‘poetic’ couple passing two park keepers, who are striving against a tsunami of fallen leaves and one keeper is saying to the other; “Red and brown autumnal tints – my Aunt Fanny!”

    Perhaps the comparison is a shade unfair… but as a keen grower and breeder of both fruit and ornamentals, I think perhaps the journey is the fun… not the destination, indeed the destination moves every time you arrive.

    Having said that though, there is no way in any this space time continuum I would allow a herd of hungry grockles within a stones throw of my plants… let alone ‘pick their own’… so perhaps it takes a whole new variety of stoic… Oh and I haven’t grown blueberries either so…Not withstanding I did enjoy both the pie and the anecdotal dessert!

  • oneluckygirl
    June 27, 2005
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    Glad to hear they were lovers, not fighters. And just so you get the complete depth of my obsession - I'm going to also turn it into a magazine article. No matter how strange, I just love men of passion. LOL



  • NoIQ gold member
    June 27, 2005
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    Wow -- this was unexpected. A rhyme AND a short story. Well worth the price of admission... The other day I took an ill-advised short cut through a flower bed and sort of "angered" a rather large number of your friends with "pollen laden rumps." I was thinking "this is going to hurt," when they all decided pollen appealed more to them than lumbering lawyers, and I survived unscathed. Your ex-Manhattanite friend would have been delighted, no doubt.

    Wonderful write(s), Jane.


  • wattle silver member
    June 27, 2005
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    My, my 'oneluckygirl' this is quite something. I couldn't help thinking of me looking for a poem to read while reading. (There were many entries when I arrived - I guess I'll never be first to pick my own). Thank you. -

  • oneluckygirl
    June 26, 2005
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    I wrote this and posted thinking, "Why would anybody care about this morning or this man or how I just have to try to capture them in any way I can."

    and you remind me

    so sweetly.

    Two pecks for you!


  • cvillelisa
    June 26, 2005
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    There are raspberries now growing wild on the edge of the marsh .. when I taste that first one - and it practically falls apart in my hands leaving me with a blood-like spot on my fingers - and then seeds get caught in my teeth while the actually berry melts on the tongue ... it is almost too much to bear and I become mad to pull every one my eye can see off the branches until I am sick ..

    This is absolutely divine. Beyond. Your prose tastes as good as any pick your own I've picked ..

    Thank you for this.

    xxoo

  • oneluckygirl
    June 26, 2005
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    Dear Incorrigible Loser,
    What have you done with my Ed and is there a ransom?

    hugs to you for this. I shall pick you a bushel and send you a peck.


  • June 26, 2005
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    This is masterful. Really. I would publish it, if I were a publisher and not an incorrigible loser. 'pollen laden rumps' is worth the price of admission all on its own, but then you blush at your impatience, and wrap it so perfectly with the ending and this becomes a bargain at any price, and no matter the wait.

    I love this, and am bookmarking it.


  • Amanda Smart
    June 26, 2005
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    Beautiful and Creative

    A learning read well worded. I love going to berry farms and mellon patches. I can't imagine this write not being real.
    All the best,
    Amanda


  • leo2
    June 26, 2005
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    tasty tiny tidbits

    I found this a very enjoyable read. It's one that can be savored and reread time and again without losing it's flavor. I envy the sweetness of your words.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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