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Rooms of Poetry

 

I enter the first room.
She liked him.
Then she saw his bad side.
The ugly him
that he cannot see.
He blames her.

 

Next room.
There is a girl cutting her arm.
All fantasy,
but good enough here.
So there she is,
bleeding all over.
Her mother doesn't know.
She is a bubble.
Pop.

 

Next room.
There is a girl
who just moved there.
No friends.
They told her
this was to be her new home.
She just wanted to run
back to her real home.
They told me to lock the door
when I left.

 

Next room.
A young person
staring at a computer screen.
It was off,
there was only a reflection.
'Digital Highway' was written
across the young furrowed forehead.
The mind was dark inside.

Next room.
Another girl cutting her arm.
Soon there will be a cut-arm museum,
no doubt.
Old ladies comparing their cut arms
over tea in fifty years,
remembering the twisted mentalities
that permeated their young lives today.

 

Next room.
I am in a cartoon world.
Two sad animals
are separated by a wall.
Both are sad.
Did I say sad?
Sad.
At least I imagined it.

 

Next room.
Another girl sitting there,
blaming herself
about a lost boyfriend
who is too young
to be the boyfriend
she imagines.

 

Next room.
There is a poet
writing poetry.
No, painting with words.
Abstract images.
I can't figure a thing out,
but it's a good read.

 

Next room.
There is another girl
alone in the corner.
Another knife.
More blood.

 

Next room.
Two people making love
covered in chocolate.
Lots of cavities.
Their parents shout, 'No!'

 

Next room.
A girl in pain
sitting in the middle of a storm.
Her life sucks.
She bleeds a lot, too.

 

Next room.
A young poet-philosopher
comparing life
to a board game in the dark.
I appear as a dark factory
spouting evil smoke in the twilight
as I try to offer some comfort.
The light switch is broken.

 

Next room.
There is a young couple
sitting under the night sky
under a maple tree.
If only they didn't have
to struggle in life,
it would last forever.

 

Next room.
A youth wishing the wishes wished
were worthy of wishing for,
I blew my teeth out
saying 'wish' too hard.
I pocket them.

 

Next room.
There is an invisible child there.
Forgotten in a sea of millions.
Alone in a crowd.
Sorrowful, but I see equal opportunity.

 

Next room.
I see a girl
screaming at a guy.
'Why weren't you there to hold me tight?'
'Why are you doing this to me?'
'Why don't you Care?'
'You are a beast!'
Her feelings spill on the floor.
I slip and fall out into deep space.

 

Next room.
Now I'm a bird
making a nest
for my family.
Twigs and leaves,
singing merrily.
The little girl below thinks I'm free,
but she don't know
how territorial we are.
Chirp!

 

Next room.
There is a funeral
for a cowboy.
A black train steams down the track,
a cowboy song is sung,
and the cowboy is spirited away.

 

Next room.
Someone sitting there,
just gave up on life.
Waiting for death.
Memories evaporating
through the vent in the ceiling.

 

Next room.
Full of vulgarity.
I waiver.

 

Next room.
A boy sits with a sniper rifle
looking out the window.
There is nothing there
but a dirty brick wall
and ants.
He shoots.
Bubbles.

 

Next room.
I am in someone's dream.
Something about lost,
sanity, reality.

 

Next room.
There is a giant mask.
OK, not giant,
I was being sensational.
With one big eye.
OK, not big.
Behind it is the real person.

 

Next room.
Another person dying,
a cancer reaches out.
I scream.

 

Next room.
A person pondering thoughts
that never end,
in the empty room,
haunted.

 

Next room.
A guy talking to his girlfriend's teapot.
'Why can't you accept me?'
'Please, just accept me the way I am.'
'Go ahead, kick me out!'

 

Next room.
A girl and a guy
turn into strawberries and ice cream.
She became his fruity topping,
but then he ran off with the spoons.
There was nothing left but the fruity topping.

 

Next room.
A broken heart
in a world of despair,
crumbling, torn,
healing once more.

 

Next room.
A room full of memories.
A face. A voice. A kiss.
A word spoken. A goodbye.

 

I see a good opportunity to say goodbye.
Goodbye.

 

 

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A short journey through some of the new writings posted.
Written June 25th, 2005

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  • social-chaos
    June 26, 2005
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    Excellent

    This is a very interesting piece of poetry. I loved how you pretty much took the world and separated it into rooms (at least that's how I took it). I loved it, it was different in an awesome way. Great job!!!


  • B2oH
    June 26, 2005
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    Clever metaphorical use here....rooms. Yes...we're all enclosed in little rooms...with doors that open upon others...not unlike the movie "Hypercube"....and emotions run rampant here..but yet, as with all things, art can be found amidst the bodies.

    Is good.


  • DazedAndConfused88
    June 26, 2005
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    awesome

    This is truely amazing...
    I loved the idea behind this poem and the structure was WAY AWESOME.
    Blew me away for sure.


  • Blazing White Wolf
    June 26, 2005
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    a very interesting read with nice imagary but personally the short lines made this an awcward read and made the flow of the write a bit rocky sticking when reading out loud
    love and light
    blaze


  • suseann
    June 26, 2005
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    Your just looking in the wrong places.There are a lot of good writes here too.But I know what you mean.When I first joined,I left 2 days later because of all the twisted stuff on here.I think it all comes down to ,the young not believing there will be a tommorrow.The world now being as exposed to all of us more then it used to be.Has to affect them negitively.But it will keep on turning.I wish for their sake,we could create a more kind caring world.All they can see is greed and lack of morals.Scares them.Very compassionate write sir.Keep reminding them of what the big picture is.LOL~~Suseann


  • glispa
    June 26, 2005
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    interesting read .. im sure many would see themselves in a room ... ive seen some of them in a nursing home

  • Shining Lucifer
    June 26, 2005
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    AAA+

    this is great i love this poem

    peace\m/


  • Little Room
    June 26, 2005
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    great

    very cool. i was thoroughly entertained and transfixed when reading this- the imagery is great and while it seems random, i love that, its just like the human mind in a way. great job


  • Pallas Athena
    June 26, 2005
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    Very intersting, I like how you took us through, and gave us your take on what you 'saw'. Another person who pays attention to those around them, good job.


  • Sjr
    June 26, 2005
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    omgfg. this is awesome. very interesting, very different from anything i've ever read. i love the concept of this, and how it's going through different pages on AP. brilliantly written, keep it up.

  • montez gold member
    June 26, 2005
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    1st verse : should it be "I can't SAY I blame her"?
    3rd verse : "they told HER"?
    I'm sorry, I can't go on, I'm bored.
    Apologies, but I just think this is a load of "tosh", and I hope you can take this criticism, because when I critique like this, I usually get barred from commenting further.
    R.

  • Pond
    June 26, 2005
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    This takes us into several different "rooms" for consideration. I was first tempted to read this as going from one AP "room" to the next. The sort of senses you would get from reading other writer's poetry. Very interesting...

  • Diverse One
    June 26, 2005
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    Impressive

    Very good, It takes a moment to understand and appreciate it all. The scenes that the words paint are so vivide, sad, happy, and too much to describe. I guess you just have to feel it. This poem takes you through the hallway of life, whether it`s your life or another`s the road we all live on is just a doorway to what we must become.


  • rower4life
    June 26, 2005
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    This was really well done... quite long, but the length presented itself to a great deal of indepth images... i had 2 fav parts from this entire peice...

    Next room.
    There is another girl
    alone in the corner.
    Another knife.
    More blood.

    AND

    Next room.
    A broken heart
    in a world of despair,
    crumbling, torn,
    healing once more.

    personally, i think youve just done a really good job with the mental images... getting us to feel what you want us to, and see what you see when you read this!! The end was simple and effective.. a pure goodbye just seemed to tie this entire thing together... very well done!!!


  • withdrawal
    June 26, 2005
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    I think I really felt that. It kinda hurt.
    ♥ Jen


  • June 26, 2005
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    This is quite original and thought-provoking. It is by some coincidence that you would share some common theme with another feature poet at this very time: "Commercialized"
    by Lettesister, almost seems to spar with your write. Anywho, love the use of repitition, nice effect.

  • jonesz12
    June 26, 2005
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    That was some pretty awesome writing you have just performed. A very clever idea brought to life with masterful poetry. I am thoroughly impressed. Good work.

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