Invisible Kid in a world his own,
Where his hate has festered, It'll never be known,
You won't leave him be, he justs wants to be alone,
Because of You his pain has grown.
Invisible Kid doesn't trust Your touch,
You won't stop loving him, it's all too much,
He doesn't want Your care and such,
He's tired of You, release your clutch.
I'm ok, please let me fade,
Great in distance, just go away,
I'm ok, just let me fade,
Let me get out of this fake life You've made.
Invisible Kid needs to live,
He doesn't want the attention You give,
As long as Your here he can never thrive,
His hate for You keeps him from truly being alive.
I'm ok, please let me fade,
Great in distance, just go away,
I'm ok, just go away,
So I can be rid of all this Hate.
Author notes
Authir's Note: i was listening to a song when i got the idea and the title for this
Written June 25th, 2005
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~dont we all know how this feels......and it has so many meanings...you could be referring to an ex while reading this poem or your parents...(for me,my parents)....its beautiful,and you are truly talented,Brady.~
xoxxoxoxo,
Megan -
that was pretty insane. kinda relatable to it you say? i thoiught that the capitializion to the other words were really different and gave extra impact to this poem...
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wow...this was really good...sometimes how i feel...i really liked it...you have some talent,kid...keep it up!
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that was amazing... i wish i could write that good
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hey thanks do i know u?
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oo i loved this poem there was a time that i felt this way and then i was just like fuck it. now i couldnt be happier if people dont like me i tell tham that they can fuck themselves. and dont let ne one pressure me it to doin somthin that i dont want to do. fight for your rights!!! fight all the way, tell people what you want dont expect them to just know. ne way. i loved this poem keep up the great work!
love you always,
april -
Aw, I love this poem, babe.
We can make it a song when we have a kick ass band
<3 Love yaaaaaaaaa
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this is really good keep writing good shit! -
Hey, I loved it too. Sounds pretty damn close to 'Tallica's version, too. Well, seeing hwo Hetfield technically wrote this, here's some applause.
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well i LOVED this brady! keep it up... loves
I'm ok, please let me fade,
Great in distance, just go away,
I'm ok, just let me fade,
Let me get out of this fake life You've made.
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wow i honestly truley loved this poem, hey and thanks for commenting on my poem i tried and thanks much for the applause, but wow your writing is awesome and i love the rhyming techniqe sometimes i read poems where alot of rhyming one word is in one stanza much like your poem form and sometimes they sound a little cheesy but wow you really know how to make it work, couple suggestion/errors, (just cuz its a pet peave of mine) 4th stanza, 3rd line hear should be here, and 4th stanza 4th line form should be from small spelling error, but anyways i hope you dont mind me pointing those out at first i used to get really annoyed but people writing them to me too cuz i make mistakes as much as anyone else but then i realized they were just helping me become a better poet, back to your poetry like i said wow awesome job im gonna applaud it to not because you applauded my poem but because your poem deserves it, anyways great job and keep up the good writing, and if you ever want my opinion on another piece just let me know, Always, Sebana
Edited on Jun 25, 10:37 p.m. because 'spelling error'.
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