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Monday

 

 You are Monday.
Every Monday I have ever known is in your kiss
and Monday clings between the pages.

You are every late-night-walking-home
fear of assassination I have ever risked.
You are every strand of lace;
each lipstick print I have ever left;
every wisp of cigar smoke and cherry bite
and the feeling of an absence at my hand.

This is Monday,
like every day is Monday, clawing at my
throat like the pretty little daemons
that have swollen at my heart and chewed away

until I’m raw again.

Author notes

Monday: a sense of fear, excitement, something new, uknown, yet very very welcome...

I am very reluctant to call this a love poem- but there is no "scared beyond I ever thought I could be, terrified of falling yet at the same time, absolutely willing it and aware that there is nothing I can do to stop it anyway" category.
Written June 25th, 2005

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  • myrataal gold member
    August 30, 2007

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    Well, a Love Poem this is ... Indeed ...

    a Rorschach of projections which is truly vivid and emotive. Well done -- I find it an interesting read, and lonely in its remembrance ...

    Myra


  • deldev
    August 11, 2005
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    Absolutely brilliant.

    Del.


  • iwishuponastar14
    July 9, 2005
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    iight

    this confused me....i dont get it. butt i liked the details...very very good!


  • Rain86
    June 26, 2005
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    Wow this is an amazing piece. It was so full of emotion that flowed quite nicely throughout this poem. You have an excellent way with words fitting an emotion and it shows. Nicely done!


  • June 26, 2005
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    This is incredible! Who knew Mondays could be full of so much.....this really grabbed my interest, I love it, especially the second and third lines......amazing job and well done!


  • heaven in handguns
    June 26, 2005
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    well described and different. i enjoyed this piece very much. really, wow. beautiful piece.
    ~kat

  • EmptyAccount
    June 25, 2005
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    I think there should be a category like that, this was a totally astounding piece that I wasn't expecting to jump out and grab me but it did. I loved these lines the most:
    'Every Monday I have ever known is in your kiss
    and Monday clings between the pages'
    Such hope that it's an inspiration, thank you very much.

    Sam. x

  • 1elephant
    June 25, 2005
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    i kinda like it and im glad that you found someone to make ur mondays worth getting up. nicely done

  • AshesToDiamond
    June 25, 2005
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