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Betrayal

I loved you so much
And it seemed you felt that way too
But I soon found out
I was so wrong

We had the day planned
But that backfired when
I saw you with her
And her with you

Her arms were around you
And you were kissing here
Then you noticed me
All you did was stare

I left without looking back
Knowing I didn't want to see you
But I learned something
Love is betrayal wrapped sweetly

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Written June 24th, 2005

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  • Hope-87
    June 26, 2005
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    I miss you too.

  • Hope-87
    June 26, 2005
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    Hey thanks a lot. You're great. Roy and I had a awesome time. He wasn't about to not do it cause he knew I would tell you. Yeah we should hurt him. He and Rachelle are great together though cause they are both players. Roy wants you to hook me up with someone safe up here. He says I need a boyfriend to do things with and that cares about me. "Give in time. You'll find someone" I know. I hate waiting though cause I don't like being a lone and not having that special someone there. You know? He also said I need someone cause he doesn't want me to be lonely. So did anything happen with steven? What time did you leave Lelah's? Hope you had fun. Are you going to go see Jared tomorrow? Hope you have fun then too. Don't leave too many scratches! Gotta go. lol

  • gto 05
    June 25, 2005
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    Hey hope it's me. Tear! You about made me cry! That's not very nive! No really this is great. And what he did to you, We should hurt him. He didn't deserve you. You need better than that thing.Give in time. You'll find someone. I did. And Honey if i can ANYONE can!!! LOL

    JJ

  • gto 05
    June 25, 2005
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    This is very good I really Miss you! We should hang-out sometime. When I'm not working!!

    Love you

    JJ
    Edited on Jun 25, 11:55 p.m. because ''.


  • goddess-of-death
    June 24, 2005
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    this was greta. i know what this is like, and i loved this poem so much, thank you for enerting and good luck to you. once agian this was fabulous
    BLessed Be
    Kim

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