How quickly reckless words cut through love's skin,
When delicate intention speaks them whole;
Though formed of gentle meanings held within,
Harsh words storm crashing curtly from my soul.
In telling loud, affections may not prove
The fairest quality of friendships' worth,
But dearer hearts may mend where love does move,
Though wide mispoken words have rent the earth.
True love's caress says more than would mere word:
That soft discourse of passion's 'bode speaks loud;
She sends her tender missive, though unheard,
In silence spelled more clear than any sound.
What passion plans, no utterance may show
While love dares not profess what hearts both know.
Author notes
[Shakespearean Sonnet]
Written June 12th, 2005
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wooooooooooooooow ! this is better than the best ! thank you so much for this awesome entry and best wishes in the contest !
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Wow the first ever sonnet that i have ever read on here and i have to say i enjoyed reading it. Thank you for entering such a romantic peice. i love love poems. good luck hun
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Breathtakingly beautiful.
I love it when disciplined writers stick to form - I'm not a disciplined writer. Sigh..I do love reading sonnets especially those about love. the last two lines especially - the clincher, really. -
Awww, that's so romantic. Words that embrace whoever desires the need and want for love can read and think to themselves that beauty lays in the heart, not the eyes. A beautiful poem with beautiful meaning, I love your poetry it hold alot of emotion and explains alot of issues. You are a very good poet. all the best and keep writing,
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She sends her tender missive, though unheard,
In silence spelled more clear than any sound.
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THAT WAS BEAUTIFUL!!! I'M STUNNED! i loved the pic too! wow
thank u so much for entering!
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i agree there are many strong words in here and you portray this love soooooo beautifully!
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What a wonderful sonnet this is passion and love are simply pouring out of it... I can only agree with Mari and Marg here, thanks for taking the time to enter this subliminal write
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Mmm, a sonnet, with very nice form. I like the first two quatrains' examination of how our words affect others. How true, that strong feeling begets strong words, and may wound without an ill intent. The third quatrain turns to love, and the mood is much softer. The couplet is an interesting summation and contrast of love and passion. I enjoyed it, thanks for bringing this lovely sonnet to our contest.
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It's a lovely sonnet, filled with the passion and energy of love. Your words are beautiful and show the mystery of passion. I'm so glad you entered it in the contst.
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ooohhh this poem is so good...i love what you have done within the sonnet form and the last two lines are great...as the value of silence...though not when u have to comment to earn points at Ap...lol...anyway you are a master of your craft and a creful and conscious artist...the picture and diction of the poem is great
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I love that shakespearean quote from Macbeth. I like what you did with this piece. I haven't tried a sonnet yet, one day I will. I am impressed how you write the different genre of verse.
I enjoyed the read.
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wow, this was EXCELLENT!!! you have great talent my dear, I love all of your work. This was so beautiful and so well done. You should think about publishing your work, I really think they are worthy for print. Your talent amazes me. Thank you for sharing.
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i also think it would be better seperated into paragraphs but that just me i think you did a good job good luck
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why the stream? Its a nice picture.
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'...But dearer hearts may mend where love does move,
Though wide mispoken words have rent the earth.
True love's caress says more than would mere word :
That soft discourse of passion's 'bode speaks loud ;
She sends her tender missive, though unheard,
In silence spelled more clear than any sound.
What passion plans, no utterance may show
While love dares not profess what hearts both know.'
Very beautifully~written sonnet, davidz...both in form & content...I am most impressed with your style of writing...Not many people can write a decent sonnet, & this surpasses decency...A Poet you might wish to read here at AP is my Friend Thoreau47; he is quite good at sonnets, as well...Thank you for sharing your Gift of Heart...Be well, Poet... Wanda
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Vow-of-Silence Love
I really liked this. I would advise seperating sceam paragraphs, but that was fine. One question...Why the stream? Anyway, I liked the poem and the fair discription of the secrets of our human hearts. -
This is what I term a smart write - a combination of good language, creativity and thought behind the writing, a pleasure to read, I certainly enjoyed it - well done
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Tis a jealous and prideful world of the poet. We cannot detach ourselves from the words, how we try...oh how we try! To give a false critique would be unfair to both the poet and the critic, so we lie...oh how we lie!
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Very beautiful i love it very good keep writing
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Hi David, I love this sonnet, I am not going to nit pick as I hate to purposely look for minor hickups, I judge a poem on the impact it has, meter, and flow,word usage,and grammar, this I love it has class my friend. hugs Di
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I think the last sonnet I've written was when I was still in high school and lol, that was in the previous century
. I know a little about sonnets (the different types, the meter, etc.), but mostly I go on my ear - how the words fall and caress the senses. This was quite nice and I especially loved the first two lines - they seem to open up the poem and pave the way for what's to follow. The last two sentences were just as lovely and powerful. The concept of this poem has depth and it addresses a very profound wisdom - indeed words can hurt just as deeds can speak louder than words. Made me think of one of my favourites sayings about love and friendship....the sweet silence in between. I enjoyed reading this!
~ Nicolette
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Very nice
This is such a strong poem. Its deep and very nicley written. -
I thought that this was an amazing write, a lot of emotions and feeling with through this write and made it all that much better. The flow was almost perfect and I loved your rhyme scheme. This was a beautiful sonnet. I am not great with the iambic meter, but this is was done extremely well. I wish you the best of luck in the contest, and hope to read more from you soon. Feel free to check out any of my writings. It would really be appreciated. Keep writing hun, -Heather
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i really love this... its completely awesome... alot of feeling and emotions went into this, it seems... i hope to read alot more from you... as long as theyre all this good... very very good write.... congratulations... props.
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So I just have to ask... Is your boyfriend named David? Cause if it is I'm gonna laugh cause mine is too... Have fun!
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ok I changed the poem. I hope it has more spunk now.
Edited on Jul 17, 11:05 p.m. because ''. -
This was a very sweet poem, though a bit repetetive in parts. However, repetition can also serve as emphasis, so it is a good thing. Thanks for entering my contest, and good luck!
Best of wishes to you!
~Saknika
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You are right. I think there is too much foreshadowing, the ending is predictable.
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I liked: that you were attempting to discipline yourself through rhyme and metre. Personally, I think that if you keep trying, you will eventually get it.
I didn't like: how there wasn't any single line that stood out for me. There was nothing to really snap me to attention. -
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Thoughtful, elegant, delicate, and dignified are words which come to mind, amid no truer a message. I like this very much. Well worth reading, thank you. -
This is a beautiful sonnet. I am not great with the iambic meter, but this is good. I am not necessarily fond of the way you used "could"
"True love's embrace tells more than could mere word"
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"Her silence sings more clearly than could sound."
Especially using it twice in a short span. I like the first one better than the second..but that is just me.
Other than that, a very nice read.
Sam
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I am married to someone of different culture and language, to communicate sometimes is difficult but as what you said, love should go beyond words. It can conquer anything even culture differences and distance. I love the choice of words here and the meter. Simply beautiful! Cheers! Eris
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Yes. I think you understood the point of the poem pretty much exactly. Love is BETTER shown through action than through words. For that matter... all PASSION of any kind. (hence passion's 'bode. (passions abode)
It isn't enough to simply say "I love you" if you dont show it. And sometimes words are misunderstood, when the intentions behind the words are completely different.
I think someone once coined the phrase "shut up and kiss me".
I used the word 'bode rather than simply abode because another word "bode" means to forshadow. and I wanted to hit at that meaning. -
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Words come out wrong when spoken, love's true case be SHOWN and silence is louder than sound...
So love is shown through actions alone, for words can be lies or mispoken? I don't bloody no I usually miss these points but I gave it a shot
And by-the-by sound and loud rhyme...just they're improper but in all technicality they do rhyme.
Good job on this, nice following of rules and an interesting point if I understood it properly.
Ta-Ta,
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Fantastic job on this sonnet! You word choice and structure are most impressive! Bravo!
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