Seclusion... by flowingwords at All poetry

I wanted
Somehow needed

The feel

Of seclusion...

Something to think about...

A storm that closes

The eye

Of my mind

A solo journey to nowhere

Yet everywhere in between

Could I be the bluest sea

Deeper than the waters

You have portrayed me to be?

Shall I...
bask in a world

Of loneliness

Or find glorious solitude

In the cracks

Of a word...

Seclusion...

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Written June 24th, 2005

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Clovis...Curious
March 4

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Superb
I like this write, just as it is. I thought you expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
DumbBaby
October 20, 2008
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mwah!

Basking is good. People dont do it enough.
ferg
May 6, 2007

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good stuff
Liked the conversational style and your use of metaphors. "In the cracks of a word" killer line!

Choosing solitude away from the monkey mind is a very good place indeed. There you'l find clarity in a murky world.

ferg
Catressa
September 11, 2006
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ahh I see so many agree with this too.. I know this need..
silence is my best friend now..
Beautiful honey
rite
March 26, 2006
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While you continue to add to your awareness loneliness becomes in an increasingly profound way your only companion in this illusion. I bloody hate this mass hallucination anyway (the reason for its existence i.e.), so I decided that solitude is probably the best friend to have around. I have never encountered one who is more faithful, more intensely present, in posession of more keys to doors that remain locked to those who despise it. The good news is that this life is merely an ephemeral stint in our journey through space and time. This kind of changes your perspective on everything occuring inside and around you. Take care,

RAge
Jersene
March 8, 2006
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Moments of seclusion can be very peaceful.
I loved the lines;
'Shall I...
bask in a world
of loneliness
or find glorious solitude
in the cracks
of a word'
Sometimes our muse, breathes in that solitude and then breathes life back into ourselves. Very soulful write! Enjoyed reading.
guruist
October 10, 2005
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I feel this poem deeply. You kno being an artistic person as well as somewhat of an intellect i desire solitude lots. It is hard to come by but very necessary. It is the times we can really think things situations decisions out and feel sound with our conclusion. Some of the greatest discoveries and inventions exist due to seclusion. The room to think. It is especially important when in a relationship. You kno how it is when the game is ran and must be deciphered. So never let him or them crowd your judgement. Wonderful write, Terrell
August 31, 2005
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"could I be the bluest sea?"

That is the most poingantly romantic and breath taking line i have read in some time.

i wish i had said that. i could write an entire poem around that one line. that is beautiful.
g--------------
July 11, 2005
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I have found some of the most brillant writers tend to bask in seclusion. I picked up on the vibe in the poem an introverted brillance.

Beautifully done
Rambler
July 8, 2005
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Simple semantic breeze
The final three lines of the last stanza were superb and spoke a volume. Just as weight lifters need to rest and let the broken down muscle rebuild I am convinced by experience that our spirits require the same. No wonder there is so much neurosis.
Nicolette
June 26, 2005
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I can so identify with this poem. We all need solitude or like Walter Rinder once said "at times I have to leave you...". A soulful poem that has a very personal ring to it; a need to escape for a while - but then you have to come back, otherwise we won't be able to read your wonderful poetry! I like the depth and the different layers of this poem. As always I adore your works!

~ Nicolette
Amanda Smart
June 25, 2005
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insightful
I call this a soul searching write--the kind you'll go back to many time's in life just to try to connect when the lost empty feeling takes over. My therory is when we find where we are to be in life then we can move pass this feeling.
A wonderful insightful write.
All the best,
Amanda
Touchof1der
June 25, 2005
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Seclusion, it has such a sad, solitary, emoty sound to it. There are times I wish for such a thing, but like many things, once we finally receive what we think we want and need, we would most likely only discover that it wasn't good for us. Nice work here.
♥ Kimberly
EmptyAccount
June 25, 2005
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Loved this poem immensely and especially the stanza
'Shall I...
bask in a world
Of loneliness
Or find glorious solitude
In the cracks
Of a word...'
I know that feeling intimately, and you've done justice to all that you write about, thank you for a wonderful read. Quite smitten with the gentle yet forceful nature of this poem.

Sam. x
Chance
June 25, 2005
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Quite beautiful with a depthful sadness though. Seclusion, can be a wonderful thing as long as it does not consume. Seclusion allows the soul to search quite deeply. Very well expressed.
-Cadence-
Silhouetted Angel
June 25, 2005
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This is a beautiful piece, leaves you thinking about it. Which is a rare find. The words flowed so nicely though. Wonderful piece, thanks for sharing

~Blue
musicalangel1449
June 25, 2005
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WEll in all I don't have a clue what the word 'solucion' means. I can't even spell it right so All I leave you with is I think it was a good write. Sorry

of melody
quietly burning
June 24, 2005
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there a quote that says "there's a crack in everything, thats how the light gets in" ... a nice simple verse showing a very contemplative person
LionessK
June 24, 2005
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I was thinking the same thing as Joel said above...it has been too long since you have posted something. I love your words..and your third stanza here really stood out to me. Wonderful as always. Don't wait too long before posting another
Take care...

~Kristy
Poet Raja
June 24, 2005
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Fantastic!!!
It is so long since you posted any poems, Kim and how beautiful this one is. The sadness of loneliness is obvious yet the depth of your poems always leave me wondering, if I have really garnered the true meaning behind your words.

So deep are your expression that it is never easy to fathom. Hope all is well with you and yours my friend.

Love adn Blessings from India - Joel