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Yesterday, Today, Tomorrow

YESTERDAY


I was surfing the net when I found a site

That would welcome all the poetry I could write.

It had rules and things I was supposed to obey

But they were quite reasonable and I thought OK.

 

I joined these people. It seemed like fun

A new creative phase I then begun.

I posted some old stuff for folk to view

And the comments helped me start writing anew.

 

TODAY


Apparently someone’s commented about someone else’s verse

And that has caused so many folks to curse.

This cursing has been done against all the rules

And they thought no one would notice,   oh what fools.


Now this sites split into different camps
Each with its own vocal champs.
Loudly proclaiming what’s right and what’s wrong.
There’s going to be real trouble before too long.

TOMORROW

As folk protest, scream and shout
The top site-boss has spoken out
The situation he has tried to defuse
But to change his rules he does refuse

I think he has done the right thing
But the comments still whiz and zing
What comes next I….ugh
Someone’s gone and pulled the plug.

Author notes

Many a true word is spoken in jest.
Written June 14th, 2005

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  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    June 30, 2005
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    What is the purpose of any poem but to give form to feelings? I felt like writing this so I did. If it raises a smile or makes people think (or both) then that is a bonus. I am not trying to start a revolution or a religion.
    If you look for deep philosophical meanings in my work you'll usually be frustrated. Basically I am an entertainer and these are my props.
    I appreciate your taking the time to read the poem and to make a comment.
    Jim S
  • ecrivain01 silver member
    June 29, 2005
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    not bad

    Although I think you are correct on all counts, I still wonder what the purpose is of the poem? It basically just states that this happened, that is happening now, and something else will happen tomorrow. Anyway, it's not bad for what it is.

  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    June 28, 2005
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    I like the opening to your comment. A well crafted sentence with a punch.
    As for the rest I'm glad we seem to be in general agreement although the furore did not start about cursing and the poem is aimed at rhe overall position not just expletives. Still anyone who hates expletives is OK although your pheasant comment was a near miss to someone who likes to read aloud!
    Jim S

  • silica silver member
    June 28, 2005
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    In such a large refectory, that has so many cups; you’re bound to get the odd one over-stirred, that suddenly erupts!

    In the five or so years I’ve been on AP the topic of free speech versus uninhibited language has blown up quite a few times, it gets larger each time with the greater numbers taking part… I think both sides have valid points… but then I very seldom use an expletive so I am probably biased. I like the rhyme, very easy going and unforced… if that is not tautology…and even if it is¡! There’s defiance for you.

  • I-Like-Rhymes gold member
    June 27, 2005
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    Thanks for your kind words and applause it means a lot to know what others think.
    Jim S
  • Citrus
    June 27, 2005
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    ah you did so well here. A delicate subject covered with great diplomacy and style, mingled with your usual brand of humour. There will always be those folk that speak out and those that dare not....where is that fence!
    Great flow and rhyme to this piece as usual.

  • vocalanarchist
    June 27, 2005
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    Humerously Good

    This poem has a great structure with proportional stanzas. That makes it quite enjoyable for that's what I often search for possibly as a psychological preferability due to how I write. In addition, rhyming schemes have a major role in what I search for as well. You obtained both of my preferabilities beautifully and this was a refreshing write. I enjoyed the contemporary humor and the message of diversity. Although a dark subject enlightened nevertheless with humor. It was an enjoyable write and I even love the smiling sun border... Very good indeed.

    Alex
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