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Veritas

 

In my darkest dreams I tried to imagine
A world without you by my side
But the images would barely come

 

You are my light, and my hope
All the wonderful things I can never be
Too close to ever be truly apart

 

The line between us was often blurred
And even when I let go of my consciousness
Your voice was still there, inside of me

 

And I don't know what I would do
If I lost you, I'd lose myself
Because you are part of my soul

 

In that imagined world, without you
I saw myself, cold and cruel and empty
Because you were all that was good in me

 

When I told you about it, you laughed
You knew even better than I did
That this connection we had went beyond time

 

So now I look back on the memory
Of starlit skies and tightly clasped hands
And the growing darkness we were powerless to stop

 


 

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I don't like this one whit, but am posting anyway since all I've been writing lately is fiction, so the poetry came out of nowhere.
Written June 23rd, 2005

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  • moonlitclover
    June 24, 2005
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    me gusta...i'd nix the comma in the first line of the second stanza...and maybe give the poem a more finished feel; it doesn't feel finished yet. come back to it later (if Muses will allow it), and be sure to let me know if you add more! but definitely a very well-composed, clear piece with poignant imagery. nicely done!

    july 16th! july 16! july 16!

    ---michelle