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a rose, a kiss good bye, and the thorn bleeding.

tonight didnt end in laughter.
but it didnt end in tears.
i left unfulfilled and broken.
and now all i can do is close my eyes
and listen to the memory of your voice telling me
that love isnt always what it seems
...and neither are   y  o  u.
i seemed to remember the smile.
that faded from your lips.
and now all i see is an emptyness in your eyes.
an emptyness that she cant fulfill.
this emptyness i see in so many eyes.
in so many broken hearts.
but you are just one of many.
so how many tears have you shed?
but how many will she dry?
a tender kiss
                      f
                  a
                     l
                        l
                           s
off the tip of your tounge
empting itself into your fears.
empting itself into your tears.
but this love will never die.
she will remain the one who stole your heart
but forgot to post mark it back to sender.
she will live only in your mind.

so leave this memory with a rose, a kiss good bye,
and the thorn bleeding.

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Written June 23rd, 2005

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  • Arsenicgrly
    October 13, 2005
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    This was very, very well written. I liked the way you used fonts (bold, italic, underling) and the "falling" letters to physically show your emotions in the poem. Again, great write!


  • Lanalover
    June 24, 2005
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    i like it.... it is very very interesting... and i really like the way you use different fonts to express different words it gives it that little extra touch... and the way you wrote falling slopin at an angle .... its really really good.... and just the way you express yourself in each line... its just full of emotion... soul and passion... and the way you ended it 'so leave this memory with a rose, a kiss goodbye, and the thorn beautiful'... absolutly magically...
    Luv Lana XoXo