The tree branches move to the wind like lace,
its leaves running as if to give chase.
The sky is blue and endless,
the sun shines on my face.
The birds fly over head
as if they're in a race.
I watch the wind,I watch the sky,
I watch the clouds move silently by.
In the spring the rain cleanses my soul
In the winter I lie here in the snow
I watch all the seasons as they come and go
each and every one puts on a different show.
There is no time in this case
this is were I lie eternally
my final resting place
Author notes
When I look at the pic I see a grave. So i revised this poem to fit the contest.
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BEAUTIFUL!
There is nothing more beautiful than this world in which we live. You have so many wonderful scenes within this beautiful poem my dear friend.
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Thank you much for the nice comment.. I'll return the favor in just a bit..glad you liked..
Dusty -
Thank you so much for your very nice comment, and kind words.
They are always greatly appreciated..
Good luck with your contest
Dusty -
brill
Perfectiion is in this peice if i may say!
i love your shortness of it and your not morbid and not sweetness either.
The rhyming goes well not force so i like to see it
great write
Anyways
Laura
xxx
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Very Good
i truly believe that poets are a special breed. they are thinkers and dreamers. their feelings for life are special. loved your verse. wish i had married a poet. -
ohhhh....I like the end twist...it went form a childs favorite spot to a grave....
Im not sure about the solid caps...
And I think there is a typo, correct me if Im wrong
THE BIRDS FLY OVER HEAD,AS IF AS IF THEIR IN A RACE
you say AS IF twice!
But besides that it has a strong image and message! Thank you and good luck!
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The Queen -
my sympathies goes out to you and ur family; this is a very good write and to use all caps in this way is like ur standing on top of a mountain shouting to the heavens above in wondering and yelling "why?" good luck
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