Sometimes things get tough
and you look back to find no one.
And even than that's not enough
Your pain as not even begun.
When every one around is happy
and your stuck there, lost.
You appear so glad, but yet your a bit crappie
Your become a pretty tossed.
You don't know who to tell
Who even will care to hear
about your living hell.
All you wanna do is disappear.
Every night you listen to that Cd
To try and clear your mind
Just to go to sleep, be set free
It never works you just walk through life blind.
Then you start not to eat
You exercise to keep busy
Your body becomes very weak
Your mind is always dizzy.
You can't think of a happy things
Every thing is dark and gray
and you dread what tomorrow brings
This happens every single day
I am afraid you have reach depression
Your not alone I'm there too
But now here is my question
To what happens next, I haven't a clue
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Written June 21st, 2005
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I can relate to this piece, it's very good. Your writing style and thye way you can expressive your feelings capivate me. You really do have raw talent and thanks for sharing, I have enjoyed every piece of yours that I have read today. Keep writing and take it easy.
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....in answer to your poem, i thought this might be a good place to put it...kind of like a negative and a positive on the same page. -
I really like the flow of this. there are alot of minor word adjustments that need to be changed in regards to the correct word spelling usage in the sentence. but overall, it reads alot like alot of my poetry from earlier on, that you might take interrest in, maybe. anyways, really good job on this one.
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Hey! I know that place you described in your poem! Not a fun place to visit at all. Nice poem.
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