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shrinking mind

Im no less happy or more insane
just a bit older and feeling the pain
Ideas I hadent thought before,
things closed behind a taboo door,
so much more aware of hate
believing more and more in fate
in fact im growing to depend on it
as my mind shrinks bit by bit
blaming all on whats meant to be
hoping it will set our sins free.

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Written June 21st, 2005

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  • June 21, 2005
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    great!

    Hey there The rhyming in this was perfect! I love how you can rhyme really well, it seems to come very naturally to you! The subject was quite original, I haven't read many poems writing about fate. I loved this, you should write and post more often, well done!