This is for the introverted soul
whose perplexing silence penetrates the void within
whose beautiful nonsense diffuses from one's beating heart to the lifeless paper
This is for the introverted soul
that is imprisoned behind the steel bars of high school stereotypes
that begs for an understanding, a compromise with a relentless life
This is for the introverted soul
a girl who's called snobby, stuck-up, a nobody
a boy who's called arrogant, anti-social, a jerk
This is for the introverted soul
containing wisdom reaching far
beyond the first star on the right
seeking a reason as to why one exists
This is for the introverted soul
that interrogates life as if one was a lawyer in a trial, beating the truth
out of a witness
that nourishes and thrives off of the vitamins of an independent and compelling lullaby
Author notes
Butler Creative Writing Camp :]
Written June 20th, 2005
A contest entry
- You Shouldn't Think What You're Feeling by reckless abandon.
390 points, ended December 15, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is a really good write. Excellent job with the language put into it.
Thanks for entering the contest and good luck :]
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wow....i love this....simply amazing write,this just captivates me from beginning to end i love how it all pulled together,nice write
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thankeeeeeee, where have you been? I haven't talked to you in a while
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I love this poem! Excellent job. The message is great.
This is for the introverted soul
that is imprisoned behind the steel bars of high school stereotypes
that begs for an understanding, a compromise with a relentless life
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This is for the introverted soul
containing wisdom reaching far
beyond the first star on the right
seeking a reason as to why one exists
My fave lines. Amazing.
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I can really relate to this. I'm pretty introspective and a lot of the time people judge me before they know anything and they go on and say things that are completely untrue bout me. Well, needless to say, it's hard to find any true friends in my highschool
I really like your vocabulary. It keeps me interested.
Blessings, Skye.
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This is for almost everyone! A piece many can relate to! Thanks for entering. Good job.
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Wow, this is an incredible piece. I remember high school. *shudders* I can totally relate.
"This is for the introverted soul
containing wisdom reaching far
beyond the first star on the right
seeking a reason as to why one exists"
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This is terrific i really enjoyed it .
This is for the introverted soul
whose perplexing silence penetrates the void within
whose beautiful nonsense diffuses from one's beating heart to the lifeless paper
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I really like this poem. You're right when you say that people can be mistaken for acting in a certain way when they're really not. We shouldn't assume from first appearances. There's nothing wrong with being an introvert.
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very good i love the pattern sorry its so short but i'm trying to comment on everybody thanx for entering the contest
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good
A lovely poem and yay to the introverts.You catured so much in this and I like how it was expressed.
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I really liked this one!!!
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The title was the first thing that got my attention to this piece. To be honest, I like where you've gone with this conceptually, but I think your point would be made with more forceful language. It seems almost as if you are afraid to swear or curse. Regarding the part saying, "a girl who's called snobby, stuck-up, a nobody/a boy who's called arrogant, anti-social, a jerk," I know exactly the types of people you're talking about, but on any given day, the terms you use are ones I know these people would only WISH to be called. I may not agree with the use of the words "bitch," "cunt," "fag," etcetera, but aren't they a lot more forceful regarding the sympathy youwant to draw to your characters?-Curtis Meyer
PS Please feel free to read any/all poetry posted on this site by K-Dense (myself) -
I really like that one - the message is very eloquently put - and a good one at that! I also liked the repetition of "This is for the introverted soul", it's actually a beautiful line. A little punctuation here and there would probably make it a bit easier to read, but that's just me.
Great write, I enjoyed it a lot!
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