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Robin And Marian

ROBIN AND MARION

 

Once was a young fellow, lived out in the woods
Wore a feather in his cap, his name Robin Hood
He was dressed all in green from head to toe
In Sherwood Forrest, marksman with his bow

Did not like the Sheriff in Nottingham far away
collected taxes from poor,  feasts,  minstrels play
Robin met a large fellow, knocked him in a pond
they became best of friends, his name Little John 

Robin and Little John formed a band of merry men
Robbed the rich,the poor would not pay taxes again
Maid Marion was Robin's girl, sheriff liked her too
Took Marion to his castle, what was Robin to do?

Sheriff planned a wedding, take Marion for his bride
Robin had to stop him, Robin had to sneak inside
Robin got his men together. hid in horse drawn carts
Sneak into the castle, jump out when wedding starts


As wedding music started,  fight became a free for all
Robin's men had a knock down, dragged out brawl
When the brawl was over, the merry men had victory
Rescued Maid Marion and the poor would be tax free


Feast at the castle, roasted pig, potatoes and quail
Robin, the poor celebrated with many kegs of ale
Robin and Marion were together, as happiness began

Just the two of them and a band of merry men

 

 

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Written June 20th, 2005

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  • neoladyem
    July 31, 2006
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    I have never read a poem about Robin Hood before. I'm really glad I did now. His stories are one of my favorite when I has a little girl. Which is kind of weird for me, I guess. Anyway you did a really great job on being crafty with the rhyming here. You were genius with it. The last part was really funny too.

  • K-Dense
    June 22, 2005
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    I agree with edna. As great a poem as this si, I'm pretty sure the spelling of Robin Hood's beau was "Marian."-Curtis Meyer

    PS Please feel free to read any/all poetry posted on this site by K-Dense (myself)


  • Edna Sweetlove
    June 22, 2005
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    The normal spelling is "Marian" I think! "Marion" is a modern (mainly US) variant! I believe there are a large number of American towns called "Marion" which may account for the confusion.


  • PoisonxXx
    June 22, 2005
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    Well the rhyming scheme was really well done, and you seemed to make the poem flow well. I personally dont like the whole robin hood story, but your poem was quite good.... mebby cause it shortened it up... lol. sorry. nicely written.

    Meg


  • AluraStar
    June 22, 2005
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    this was so cute.its something you could tell to children to help them remember the story.very good


  • thecaptain
    June 22, 2005
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    classic

    what a wonderful classic to rewrite!! great job


  • kjd
    June 22, 2005
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    the good...the good...and the...good! *grins*

    I love it--perfection in meter and rhyme, engaging retelling of the classic--BRAVO!


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    June 22, 2005
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    Very well done its not as easy as it looks rhyme and you did a great job here as for Marion what do you think made the men merry
    Paul


  • Karmageddon
    June 22, 2005
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    I am a slave to rhyme for most of my poems, and to be quite honest, some of the rhyme here seemed quite forced and 'off', but then again, for the lighthearted nature of this poem, I doubt the neccessity of staying up all night trying to fix that.
    I loved the ending, very humorous twist on the story.
    Overall, I think it was a pretty good read, thanks for the laugh.


  • peluche
    June 22, 2005
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    This was a great rhyme. You really excuted it flawlessly. It had a strong flow and a very humorous ending. I like that picture you found. This is a perfectly written children's piece.


  • transcendental baby gold member
    June 22, 2005
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    This is a great modernization of an old classic ... and your rhyme is write on time ... loved it! Esp. the ending


  • dottedmyeyes
    June 22, 2005
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    i wish i could rhyme like that. good retelling of a well known story.


  • SineDie
    June 22, 2005
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    Merry

    I enjoyed this poem because I love the story of Robin Hood. Your Rime scheme was amzig as well. It's a really good write, the way you put it all together! The only slip was the last stanza when began and men don't rime but It's not like I could write like this... : f : D


  • suseann
    June 22, 2005
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    Cute story, nice smooth read.```Suseann
    Edited on Jun 22, 11:24 because 'spelling'.


  • dogsamongus
    June 22, 2005
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    Interesting. As I read I had two thoughts: 1) this is a poetic recount of the story of Robin Hood, and that by itself has intrinsic value but; 2)since most people already know the story why did we need to read it again. And then I got to the end, where you finally add your own part to the story--the last and humorous line about Marion begrudgingly living with Robin and his men. This saved it for me. Not that the poem was bad before but it was something we all already knew, until the last line gave us something new to consider.


  • CountryCousin
    June 22, 2005
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    A great job.

    I liked how you did this one and would like to applaud it but now I am out and you know I just found this one completely delightful. A splendid read and that ending was superb. Wonderful job here.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    June 22, 2005
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    Story of the good..Robin..hood..

    The story of the Robinhood with proper thrill is the wonder of this write. The each para is gradually creating an eagerness for further movement of the write .The end of the story is very pretty and making this write with a happy end.The flow of the write is very impressive and give an impacat of the musical and poetic story.prabhudayal khattar


  • beeblebear
    June 22, 2005
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    Excellent. A tale of derring-do served up in easy to handle bites of poetry. I think this is an excellent example of a good childrens poem. There were a couple of instances where it would flow slightly better if you changed a couple of words, but none serious enought to truly detract from the overall grooviness.

    Have a monkey


  • carmel apple
    June 21, 2005
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    Your welcome.


  • Sandygram silver member
    June 21, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    Carl thank you my friend. It is always a pleasure to hear from you. It always brings a smile. Hope all is well in your life. Thank you for this wonderful comment. Glad the ending made you laugh. God Bless and have a wonderful day. Always, Sandy
    Edited on Jun 21, 11:10 because ''.

  • Sandygram silver member
    June 21, 2005
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    A EONDERFUL POEM, WRITTEN WITH YOUR TRUE LOVE

    Thank you for the wonderful comment. I so appreciate it. Take care, Sandy


  • Sandygram silver member
    June 21, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    Thank you for the wonderful comment Ashley. I am so happy you enjoyed it. I always love your wonderful comments. God Bless you. Take care, AP Mom
    Edited on Jun 21, 11:11 because ''.


  • Sandygram silver member
    June 21, 2005
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    WONDERFUL COMMENT

    I am so happy you enjoyed my poem Mia Donna. It is always a joy to read your comments. God Bless you my friend. Sandy

  • Linda Sue silver member
    June 20, 2005
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    Very clever!

    Were you watching "The Adventures of Robin Hood " on TV? The one with Errol Flynn and Olivia De Haviland is one of my favorite movies. Great poem! Love, Linny
    Edited on Jun 20, 4:54 p.m. because ''.


  • carmel apple
    June 20, 2005
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    Wow the story in rhyme. Isnt it they hid in hores "drawn" carts.
    I love the end that made me laugh.


  • agalford7053
    June 20, 2005
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    another one of your poems that made me smile. This is very cute mum. I like how Marion was happy until she learned that she would have to live with Robin Hood and his men.. that part made me laugh and made me smile .. This is a fun tale of Robin Hood.. you did an excellent job. ..
    Love ya.. your AP daughter
    ~Ashley~

  • Mia Donna
    June 20, 2005
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    Haha very cute And I just learned the full story of Robin Hood. I never knew it before.

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