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A vision in my dreams

Missing image
Have I seen you in my dreams?
A vision of your face that seems,
to only appear when I least expect
a lovely image of beauty so perfect.

Have I felt you deep within my soul?
Sensations of your touch win me whole.
The emotional heart tickles in depth
a tranquil touch so perfect.

Do you feel me in your heart dear?
can I hold you in my arms so near.
take away any sorrow or pain
teach you how to love again.

Do you remember when we met?
By the beach just as the sun set.
first glance said you were the one
my life with you has just begun.

Do you feel my love for you is true?
make me always adore your view.
Every thought of you makes me shiver
we're inseperable like water in a river.

Shall we sail the sea of life together?
Ride the storms in all kinds of weather
Watch the sunrise over the mountains
see the stars twinkling in the heavens.














Author notes

1st and 4th stanza by jennifer

2nd and 5th stanza by eternalpoet

3rd and 6th stanza by angelica

I hope this is OK Janice.
Written June 19th, 2005

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  • jenelda silver member
    June 29, 2005
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    Thank you Jan for this wonderful contest, it was quite unique and fun to do, I also thank you from my other team members.

    jennifer


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    June 28, 2005
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    Congratulations on your new silver trophy. Your team did a great job with this poem. All of you deserve a pat on the back and the silver. Great job


  • angelica silver member
    June 28, 2005
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    Thank you Team for the effort you put into the contest, it was very challenging, I'm very proud of both of you.APPLAUD YOURSELVES
    love jennifer

  • jenelda silver member
    June 27, 2005
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    Dear Janice, how do we transfer it over in the other persons name?

    jennifer


  • Janice M Pickett
    June 27, 2005
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    allpoetry.com/contest/1354783 please get your next team member to enter with their name.

    HUGS

  • Theasp
    June 25, 2005
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    Well done.

    Very nicely done, romantic too, a visual banquet with the art.

  • jenelda silver member
    June 25, 2005
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    Thank you Herman, it was a team effort between the three of us.
    jenni

  • jenelda silver member
    June 24, 2005
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    That's fine Jan, I have been offline as we had to reformat the PC.

    enni


  • Janice M Pickett
    June 24, 2005
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    Hi Team
    Due to unforseen circumstance. I have extended the contest closing date until the 28th June. I will then judge it on the 29th of June,
    HUGS
    Jan
    Edited on Jun 24, 2:25 p.m. because ''.


  • Prince Charming
    June 24, 2005
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    What a fantastic write. Wow so much romance in your words. great rhyming and excellent use of words. Together makes it a absolute fantastic poem. I enjoy redaing it so very much. Have a fantastic weekend
    Hugs Herman


  • aslanlight
    June 23, 2005
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    How exquisitely romantic. The picture is beautiful and it all fits together very well. Good luck.


  • jenelda silver member
    June 20, 2005
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    Thank you Deke for your wonderful comment, it was quite a challenge
    Hugs jennifer.


  • jenelda silver member
    June 20, 2005
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    Thank you Ed, I'll have to see if you have posted your group one. Thank you for the wonderful comment.
    jennifer


  • jenelda silver member
    June 20, 2005
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    Dear Janice, that sounds fine, sounds good, this really is a unique contest.
    Love jennifer


  • Deke
    June 20, 2005
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    This is really good; I enjoyed it very much. You three did a wonderful job on it. Good luck in the contest.
    Deke


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    June 20, 2005
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    Great work on the poem. It flows together so well and possesses such a special feeling. It really is a great piece of poetry. Your team did an amazing job... good luck in the contest


  • Janice M Pickett
    June 20, 2005
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    Thanks guys. This is awesome. Good luck in the contest. I just want to explain how I am going to do the judging. I am going to run 3 stages. stage one the people who entered this undertheir name get the trophies. Then stage two. Re-enter the same poems under the name of the next team member. They will then get the next cups Silver. then we will repeat it the third time and the last 3 will get their bronze. That way the Gold team the silver team and the bronze team each get a trophy. I hope I explained that ok. 3 gold cups, 3 silver, 3 bronze.


  • eternalpoet
    June 20, 2005
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    5 Stars *****

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    wow

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    i wont say much.. co zi was in it.. wowowowhahahahaha.. overexcited bad guy on his way ..

    thanks my pluff pluff spngey dolll. for addig me ..

    take cares and have a nice time my dear friend....... just keep it up...... your humble little friend...... ........ ......... ........ - vic ( who else?)


  • jenelda silver member
    June 20, 2005
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    bluuz girl 8 minutes ago
    smile lotion available here - Pepper 27 critiques, 8 poems. Currently online. said:
    Verdict: beautiful!
    This was beautiful It was so descriptive and imaginative. I really enjoyed it! You have a flair for words to be romantic without being too sappy!! (delete?) (reply?)

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