Silent the clouds hover sullen
Threatening grey drops to fall
Dryness salivating hot and parched
Life governed by water stalled
Stillness clinging wet and moist
As time so slow stands still
Nature's voice a whisper now
As life flowing down gullies and hills
Trickling and humming
Rivulets running
Softly kissing the dust so sweet
Roiling and tumultuous
As mist comes down
Each droplet wet and neat
So meaningful, in sensual sound
Ephemeral no longer, now known
In wet discourse life rebounds
Bonding growth with life re-sown
Cycling, rolling, smeared and wild
Like tumbling clowns all bright
Now Nature's circus is back in town
Green rebirth and colours' flight.
Author notes
Written June 19th, 2005
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Beautiful! This was a lovely tribute to the awesomeness of springtime. New life and hope reborn. The images were animated
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Wow, this is amazing, I really liked this. Nature is my favourite! Wonderful job, and keep it up.
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As has been said before this reminded me a lot of a long, long dry spell finally ending with the rain and then everything coming alive again. Great imagery, I love the words you've used for your description and the way this entire thing is put together. It's really very lovely.
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good work
Its a little deep. I like the transition from a melancholic mood to a joyous mood. -
it actually feels good to read a poem about springtime mid-October! somehow refreshing!
you've used beautiful imagery in creating this piece, and I especially liked the "circus" references toward the close of the poem. the circum always came to town--(barnum & bailey at MSG) every spring, so the inference for me was right on target.
glad I had the chance to read this...really good piece of writing!
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I liked the imagery, but was little worried about tense changing somewhere in between...simple present was good enough, why did you make it continuous 'round the middle!
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this is a beautifully written piece on nature...it shows you have a deep appreciation for nature and you portray it well in your writing. great work!~becky
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this is a very lovely rhyming poem. your rhymes are excellent and sound very natural, not forced.
I like the nature aspects of this poem. you paint a vivid picture with your imagery. most enjoyable!
~travis
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Wow, the words were great. U used them in the rite way and i think with a little more jsut a little more detail, ud be an autho. U ahve the talent u ahve the ability to keep a reader amused, great great great stuff. I think u should keep writing forever, I say in a week, with this advice, u can be published....Great stuff, great stuff!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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alot of beautiful words placed into this also beautiful poem, it shows true talent, and love from the writer, to put together a fantastic piece. all the best.
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Wonderful, sensory imagery of the sight and sense of a dry spell being broken. Good one, Mike!
Great to see you back!
~G
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