To an Old Flame
It was so good to see you again last night
After Oh so many years.
You made such a pleasant sight
Once I wiped away the tears.
Was it really twenty years ago
That night I proposed to you?
When your answer laid me low
Saying our union would never do.
I remember how I pretended I had accepted
Though my heart could not agree.
All my dreams you had rejected
When you said you didn’t want me.
I still carry a reminder of Cupids wars
When first he set my heart aflame
So I will remain affectionately yours
And wish that you could say the same.
Author notes
I was asked to contribute a piece for an anthology called "Affectionately Yours" This is what I wrote
Written April 19th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Gimme anything by a glimpse of hate.
300 points, ended December 15, 2005, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Aaaaaw!
Lovely. But sad.
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Thanks for the comments Angel. The competition closed last year (I was unplaced) but I appreciate the sentiments.
Jim S -
I really like your poem,and good luck in the contest, not that u need it. Angel2006
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Thanks. I don't think I've written to a dragon before
Jim S -
Thanks for the comment and good wishes Ashley.
Jim S -
awww... im sorry...
very good poem, very heart-felt..
good luck in the contest!
-ashley -
i like it and im not usally one for love peoms
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No blame on either side here. Just Life doing what it does.
Still it got my name in print again. I've just got my copy of the anthology recently.
Jim S
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Sweet & Tangy
did she explain why did she say no, didnt she love you enough for you to actually be provoked to ask her to marry you???
oh!
how could she do you such a henious crime, it always puzzles me everytime-bad people are usually get everything that they want and good people get their hearts broken, is it fair???
on the bright side
_she brought out good poetry from you, i really like the rhyme and rhythm of this poem, i can never produce works that rhyme, it is just too much work, i dont really like editing my poetry
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Thanks for reading. Is it compulsary for mothers to make weird comments. I'm too embarassed to repeat some that my mum used when I wasa youngster.
Jim S -
Bit of pain never hurt anyone, that's one of the odd things my mum used to say to me.. I must have been 8 when i spent a day trying to make sense of it! But i have decided she was right.
This is rather sad but very well written.
Barb -
Thank you for those kind words K C.
Jim S -
This is wonderful!The rhymes are not at all forced and the poem flows like no other. Its so amazing that you thought of something so out there, yet so many can relate.
I really enjoyed reading this. This was deffinatly worth my time.
Keep writing, your amazing.
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It's time to come clean Leo. The original rejection happened. The rest is pure invention to satisfy a request for an anthology poem on the topic "affectionately yours" It was worth the slight deception to get something in print after a dry spell. (and it worked)
Jim S -
Being rejected by an old flame must have been devastating. I can relate to that feeling of loss of a love that was never meant to be. Very smooth rhythm and rhyme in this tender sentimental piece.
Sincerely,
Leo Long
ps. Thanks for perusing my poetry. I do appreciate it. -
Thanks for the comment. Stylish! mmm like that
Jim S -
Thanks for your comment
Jim S -
Why does love have to hurt eh? Must have seemed quite strange to have all those feelings flood back which you thought you had tucked away in a little corner of your heart.
A gentle stylish piece....sniff sniff -
Heart breaking...to have all this love for someone and that person not wanting it. I like the flow in this poem..beautifully sad~
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Nice rhyme and rhythm.
The silly old cow doesn't know what she's missed does she?
R
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