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A Deeper Regret

I feel
Trapped in a dark hole
Trapped in a carousel of pain
I wish I could change the course of time...
I wish I could have her back
I wish for her
I wish for her

I'm lost
in a wilderness of confusion
Every option has failed me.
Everything suggested, everything not suggested,
Everything I've tried has failed.
I just wish I could have known before
What I know now,
So I could feel normal again...

I feel
Trapped in a dark hole
Trapped in a carousel of pain
I wish I could change the course of time...
I wish I could have her back
I wish for her
I wish for her

My recent feelings have shunned the world...
All except for that one thing...
She's all I want...
I just wish I could have known before
What I know now,
So I could feel normal again...
So I could be happy...
I wish for her

I have sunk to a lower lowest of lows,
One that comes with the knowledge,
That nothing can save you now.
I wish for her...
A lower lowest of lows,
A deeper regret for what I did,
A deeper desire than ever before...

I feel
Trapped in a dark hole
Trapped in a carousel of pain
I wish I could change the course of time...
I wish I could have her back
I wish for her
I wish for her

Author notes

It's just a short poem I wrote about my feelings... for I can't tell anyone about them... no one can help me with them... Why has fate frowned upon me?
Written June 18th, 2005

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  • FlyingShadow09
    July 25, 2005
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    ur a bunny

  • suicidaldreamer090
    July 8, 2005
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    yummy.Ilike this poem

  • Supernova605
    July 3, 2005
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    Expressive

    I thought this poem was very well written...i can only guess what this about (this is brett)...don't worry, I don't think you've fallen to a lowest of lows! cya


  • AmethystRose
    June 21, 2005
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    i disagree, the fact that it is confusing portrays how he feels as he says. Anyway, its an amazing write, i LOVE the line "Trapped in a carousel of pain" its juxtaposition; carousel is positive, pain is negative. Great technique, beautiful imagery. Keep it up!!


  • June 19, 2005
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    what is this about? seriously im confused, what are u wishing for? this poem leaves me unsatisfied, like there should b more. its good i just think its a tad too abstract.

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