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Ready and Willing

Kneeling before him
Hands bound behind
My eyes do not dare look up
I see the horsehair flogger
Sitting at his hip
The pleasure and pain
Delivered  from this instrument
Drives this girl wild
Shifting his weight
Testing the swing
I try to calm my heart
I am here, in this moment
Ready and willing
To receive
To submit
Exquisite pain
Shocking pleasure
All mine to accept,
His to enjoy.

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Written June 17th, 2005

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  • October 22, 2005
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    Lovely!

    Beautiful write... I simply love it... Oh to feel the pain and the pleasure all at the same time... Thank you for the magnificent gift of your pen.
    ~Elba


  • whispersoftly
    October 22, 2005
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    STUNNING, EROTIC AND SIZZLING what a write well done xx Cheryl
    Edited on Oct 22, 2:32 because ''.


  • Princess Muse silver member
    June 24, 2005
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    I think you did a great job with this considering how short it is...It is hard to work a scenario into a poem form in very few lines...My only suggestions would be to center it on the page for more affect and perhaps a different border than the butterflies...Somehow it seems to distract from the serious nature of the bondage scene.

  • Vataraxia
    June 24, 2005
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    Ooh, puts me in the mood. Yum. I think the way he poem looks on the page is a bit bland, and it could used some puctuation, either that or maybe don't put that comma in the second-last line. I love the background. How different.

    I enjoy your contest.


  • Andy Stephenson
    June 23, 2005
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    very good

    Seemed like a good poem. Fits the catagories of your contest. A good sample, I think. I am going to copy and try to enter a story since it won't work automatically as a prewrite. I think your poem has style and class for its type.

    Andy


  • Bekabulwinkle
    June 23, 2005
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    seductive and submissive

    you put me in the moment......

    seductive and submissive -

    you opened eyes to the begining of what can make you fly

  • noel lovett
    June 21, 2005
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    my associate

    I love how you write you submissiveness and show that you are his slave, it is very provacative and seductive.

  • arden
    June 20, 2005
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    no thing as exciteing as that first bite of leather on flesh... unless 'tis too submit. alas... the one to provide such pleasure, or ttake the pleasure that i could gi' is so faaar.... elusive. but och, through your words, a lass can ponder and dream.

    arden


  • ZorroTheFox silver member
    June 17, 2005
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    this was a cute little read and I enjoyed it alot. I'm still hunting for the one to take such a position in a more permanent capacity but alas she has eluded me too well.

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