My love
Ever since I opened my eyes I have been waiting to touch you.
With the first breath came the pining to hold you.
And till death, I will walk on the path to know you.
You have evaded me for all these years,
and I know you will do so for some more.
But, I will keep on walking, muttering
hope, desert me not !
I have felt the touch of your shadow
often running ahead of me
My walk on this unending, never turning road
is being taken with the aim of meeting you.
When ever some one abandoned me
I looked up to you to hold me,I,
the fragile girl who needs acceptance,
who needs to be told-get up and walk.
I waited, am waiting, holding my breath
for that one glimpse of you,
for that divine touch ,
that would transform my life.
I am waiting for you, Mon amour
my prefect,
my ideal,
self.
I am waiting for you to hold my hand
and lead me out of darkness to light
I have spent my life looking for you,
for I believe in- KNOW THYSELF !
Author notes
Some people spend their lives trying to get to know themselves, to know what they are when insulated form circumstances.
This poem is about one such search.
Written June 17th, 2005
A contest entry
- Greatest Love You've Ever Had! by allaplgs.
500 points, ended June 22, 2005, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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thanx for taking out time n commenting
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thnx for the precious comments,yeah its a journey,with blocks, obstacles,pull backs,fog,dillemmas,everything,smtimes u lose track smtimes u get bk on the road
but wht matters is dont get tired whn u get out of track
hugs
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This is a subject I've been hung up on for a while now, all of this self discovery and sense of purpose. Slowly, I'm getting it, and from your lovely poem here, it seems that you're getting it all figured out too!
Just remember, it's all about the journey, not the destination! -
Know thyself is very important, and you have penned a great poem about that topic. You know what you want and have stated it in this poem. Good write,
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thank u for taking out time for reading it
was in a writer's block for last 6 months,didnt even cm on the site
my first visit n urs was the first comment
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thanx -
It' so beautiful, very well written. Nice flow as well.
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thanx Rach, it was a very nice comment.
luv -
Really wonderful, I echo what most people have said - a really tricksy write, the imagery of you trying to find another you , but not really another etc. You obviously explained it a whole lot better than I can!! It really caught me as I thought what others did - it's about a 'true love', and this had me hooked anyway, but to then turn it into self-exploration, just sold me completely - beautiful write. xx Rach xx
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Quite the interesting take on the greatest love of your life. At first i thought this was just to a person yet to be known and in a sense i guess it is. Well done, take care and God bless.
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thankyou dear
luv -
i lke your different take on the prompt of the contest, and as for my entary, i felt it was cliched, oh well, thanxs for the comment, and your poem is very beautifully written, youhave a gift, i am glad to see it put to use.
love and luck,
Bri -
Great piece! The insight, longing. I liked that you took a cliche longing for another and transformed it to something unique about self-exploration. It's refreshing to see such romanticist optimism.
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You should read my own love poem "I Want You To Be The One," and feel free to read any/all additional poetry posted on this site by K-Dense (myself)-Curtis Meyer
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thanx mama,this was such a sweet comment
luv -
This is really incredible! The fight within ourselves is evident to most, yet most people will continue to search and never find. I love the way you have chosen to write this as an elusive lover. It lends wonderful credibility to your poem.
Good luck in the contest, my dear. Hugs, Mama ♥ -
thank u dear
luv -
Excellent
A lovely piece and I like how it was about you and not another person.When reading you think at first it's about another love.Well done..
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hey !
thnx and i just read ur sign, its very interesting !
great -
hey darlings !
take some time and reread it
you got it all wrong !
and if u still feel the same go and read author's comments !
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oh this is a very lovely write with such emotion attached to it the reader gets a real sense of the feelings you have for this person great job and good luck in the contest
love and light
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Loved it!
wow that was great. i have great friends like that, one that I do have strong feelings for. it's a perfect poem that explains what we all can feel for someone special. loved it! -
I love it. The end was great.
Good luck in the contest!
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