Splatters and echoes
drips of comfort to my soul
and I cried
Tears that taste hollow now
aftertaste of regret
You're gone
and I am left
hanging here
just trying to breathe
Once more
it's raining
and I'm thinking
I shouldn't be thinking about you
But I am
Where do I go from here?
Darkness surrounds me
shadows in mist
toes in the grass
remind me
life is soggy like that
it's raining
and I'm thinking
I shouldn't be thinking about you
I should walk away
from the games that we make
pretend that it doesn't hurt at all
I should try and remember
it heals in time
But it's raining
I shouldn't be thinking about you...
Author notes
Written June 17th, 2005
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Very nice. I like the background. Also, I like the title.
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Such a solemn piece. These are some powerful passionate words you've penned here. You've done a swell job of capturing the mood.
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Thank You
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Actually the write is perfect how it is. Breathe is spelled right you obviously were thinking of someone else's write. That and the background fits perfect with this write as it shows drops. Thanks..
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there are some steps you could take to fixing this up a little
one: different background, it's hard to read
two: proofread, breath is not the same as breathe
three: more content, it's kind of bare
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A meloncholy poem, Catressa... very well written and expressive of those lonely times, the wish you were here times.
I prsonally love the rain, which is what initially brought my attention to this particular poem. And I'm glad it did.. It's a super write
Dee
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Sometimes we can cry so much it seems as though the rain is cascading down upon us... it's hard to let go of something when you want to hold on... sighs Take care of you darling
Shari
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Without the bad we would never appreciate the good! This is sad but it is very good! What happened was bad but the way you wrote it was very very good! To me this poem is all about reflection. Looking back at what has happened. Great write Catressa!
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You are awesome! this is very nicely written,beatuiful imagery. makes me wish it was raining. -
A lovely poem but so bittersweet. Life sometimes seems so unfair. I enjoyed reading this. Hugs, Patricia
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What a pretty and bittersweet write.
Life is soggy like that
That just won my imaginary best line of the day award.
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Wow, this is great. Very very well written...
This has deep meaning in it, and I really enjoy reading it...as i enjoy reading everything you write.
Keep writing and I will keep reading.
Take care, Cat
Tammy
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