Heavy sleeper was Rip Van Winkle
Twenty years with nary a tinkle
But on the day that he awoke
We all thought the dam had broke.
Author notes
Option 1
Written June 16th, 2005
In a list
A contest entry
- Four Lines by Erik Ambrose.
700 points, ended March 27, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Under Four Lines and Funny - A couple of Options. Prewrites by Anastasiya.
477 points, ended July 23, 2007, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CAN YOU _WRITE A CLERIHEW???????????????? by acari27.
365 points, ended February 4, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short Poem Frenzy! by ShadowsMidnightRose.
1050 points, ended April 16, 2008, 71 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Humor in Brevity by RatherImaginative.
1500 points, ended January 12, 22 entries
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What did you think
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This one made me laugh. Quite a story was told in these four short lines . . . I really enjoyed this piece. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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i like it
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This was funny and made for a great four line poem.
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Hehehe. I like that. I am going to reread it again later on. But it is nice. Good luck!
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Very Funny
I read your poem again and again. It is so simple and yet so funny. An old tale narrated in the sweet language of poetry. I enjoyed it alot. Thanks for sharing and GOod Luck in the contest. Would you mind reading one of my poems" Life Imitates Art"? http://allpoetry.com/poem/2363531 I would appreciate your comments. -
A long time since I read this form. Works so well in the poem here - liked the image one gets of this man after 20 years - never ending flow from all that sleep. Cute!
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I completely forgot about Clerihews. I'm not sure which one I like better. Thank you for entering.
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This is a darling Clerihew, so funny. You really have a knack with writing these. Best of luck in the contest, ♥ Belle
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lol..this is a wonderful little verse. Very funny and true to form. An interesting style that seems really fun to compose.
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lol lol funny funny....I can hardly wait til morning, 20 yrs,now that is some bladder! thanks for entering this into the contest~vj
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lol...another cute one...I would think after all those years he would have a steady stream flowing and need a change of clothes...
Very cute humor.
I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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LOL very cute and funny, I may take on this form it seems simple and one I've not tried. Not sure the hiakus are going to make it with me well. Best wishes in the contest. Sherry
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