It was
My life
I lived it every day
Now it's
Ending
The ticker leads the way
Ticking
Licking
The cotton ball of time
It's taking
My last
Not fair, it's such a crime
Helpless
I stand
The ticker's tied me still
Each tick
reminding
I forgot to write my will
Author notes
It's for the contest, choice #2. I tried to create the rhythm of the ticker with my words. Hopefully, it worked.
Written June 15th, 2005
A contest entry
- Sick of AP Contests! by Evilia.
400 points, ended June 30, 2005, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow...that was awesome.
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Thta was a very cool poem. I liked the format and the way you incorporating the ticking of a clock type of rhythm. The poem itself was also really good. The ending kinda ties everything all together, and teh way that I read it, it gave somewhat of a comic relief to the poem.
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awesome! I love the ticking words, rhyming, everything, short but it gets you thinking. love love love it
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Very Interesting point of view!
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Very nice. I like the idea of your poem--time ticking to a close. Very imaginative.
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This is pretty cool, I like how you incorporated the ticking of the clock into the rhythm of the poem. I really like the last line - "I forgot to write my will." It gives that kind of "oh shit, it's all over and it's too late" type of feeling - exactly what i was hoping to see. A very dynamic ending... I'm a big fan of those.
Great job
Evilia -
Love it. YYYYYAAAAAAAHHHHH
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