Staring at them , dreaming of them ,
I can't get them out of my mind.
So Long, and so sleek and sexy,
and so perfectly lined.
And the body above them,
So beautifully pure.
But in my eyes is more,
then just lust I am sure.
In my imagination I see it,
Our bodies intertwined.
sweaty passionate desire,
your legs wrapped around mine.
My visions take me on a trip,
that makes my soul shudder.
I need to find the courage,
So these feelings I can utter.
I want to hold you in my arms,
kiss you from head to toe.
run my tongue up your legs,
and over places that don't show.
wanting your legs wrapped around me,
as I taste your sweet desire.
knowing that is the only way,
To end this painful fire.
Author notes
Written June 15th, 2005
A contest entry
- Raw Topic 4 by Ms. Trick.
500 points, ended June 17, 2005, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Bravo!
Excellent sense of meter, fine cadance. Bravo! -
Thank you stinger things have been kinda crazi lately but yeah i try Niki
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your very welcome I read the subject and this just came out niki
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Something like a violin string twisting to its lover.
Thanks for entering!
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Thank you cherry wood I am so glad so many people enjoyed this piece Niki
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Thanks Soulmuzik I am glad you enjoyed it but you never said what the problem was with that line lol get back to me on that one K Niki
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Thank you ecol528 I am glad you enjoyed it
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Thank you natari as always you are to generous I am just a lowly Poet who Knows how to use a pen lol Niki
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Excellent
Fanning myself this was hot woman..Very good imagery and tastefully done...Bravo
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Wonderful
Time for my weekly AP cold shower. This blew up like a storm. It went from cool to hot very naturally, but fast as a sudden fever. You are wonderful.
Peace,
Ed -
only one part of the poem do i have a problem with
knowing that is the only way,
To end this painful fire.
i like how instead of making this like regular erotica it was more of a love thing, an analogy if you will, your poem was making love while many others were having sex... beautiful -
The poem certainly gives an edible edge that beats out most erotica I know. Honestly, you've put a great deal of the erotica I've seen on this website to shame. Keep up the good work, and best of luck in the contest.
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