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Drunken Thoughts Through Eyes of Glass

Through my eyes of glass
Helplessly I stare
As the broken shards of bliss
Are swept into shadows of despair.  
Shunning the days that pass me by,
Only the nothingness can hear my cries.

Deserted happiness,
Forgotten and lost.
Collecting years of
Dirt and must.  
Drunken thoughts
Break from my mind,
All Heaven(s) now vulnerable
For Hell(s) to find.

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This is another old poem i decided to put on.  I dunno about this one...its kinda weird.  i don't know. Its just a poem of thoughts pretty much, not really anything special.
Written June 15th, 2005

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  • TheGoose
    July 16, 2005
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    Wow, I loved it! You do have a way of making your words flow and this one I had to read a couple times to fully understand. (which is a good thing! lol) Great job, keep it up!
    peace and lurv,
    clairebear


  • aboycalledtrevor
    June 15, 2005
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    you have an awesome flow to your poems...they are short lines yet you pack them full of emotion and detail. amazing!