Every night, when they wake up high
The painted sunset sky,
She would start her dance to light
Her celestial guests, sparkling bright.
Fully clad in a sapphire glow
She would dance with the wind in blow,
To the tune of the breeze
She would sway letting her guests freeze.
Her tightly tied auburn hair
And her delicate hands, fresh and fair,
Would gently move to the beat
While they fly, her tender feet.
Ruby gems adorn her lips
As emerald belts hug her hips,
Lapis stones light her eyes,
As she dances beneath the sunset skies.
In her tightly tied auburn hair
Were found, diamonds studded with care,
Who was this fairy on show ?
None of them, did ever know !
She would dance, the whole night long
Was it to the sea or skies, did she belong ?
She danced near that ivory shore,
Where drops of crystals, from the clouds did pour.
None had dared to see her close,
All they saw was her distant pose,
A song unheard, she did sing
Oh untold tales of love to ring.
While twilight comes, she slowly goes
To the waves, where no one knows ?
Some said, she was a mermaid love,
Some said, she came from above !
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Written June 14th, 2005
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awesome write
beautifully written. lovley imagery. thank you for sharing your words with me. keep on writing. -
Beautiful! Very nice imagery. I like this. Thank You for entering. Good Luck and best wishes!
Brandy
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Good job! The contest will be judged shortly! I have one more entry to read! Thanks for entering! Keep up the great work!
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Excellent! I love your imagery, you've described so much beauty with this poem. Great rhyming, and your rhythm is good to. It flows very nicely. Best of luck in the contest! - Ky.
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This piece has beautiful imagery. It's so entracing to read through it. and all the rhyming really adds to the piece. great write.
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4 stars ****
wonderful rhyming raspberry.. i liked it the way you made the poem.. the representation was superb.. i loved the fluent flow.. ..and personally i love rhyming poems and this poem is awesome.. really i liked it.. good work ..
nice write..
thanks for sharing..
take cares and have a nice time my dear friend....... just keep it up..... your humble litte friend......
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interesting
The fantasy was captured in this poem..it was interesting display of words...'claps' -
awesome
this is a good poem. I like the word use and the way you made the lines flow. I also love the title. good job -
This was a delight to read,
enchanting and well within the range of this
contest
Great penning and bravo to you
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it is a beautiful poem you have penned here...it's romantic and you have those wonderful jewels to describe the colors...so pretty...i hope you win
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I think "A unheard song" should have read " a song unheard". Nevertheless, I enjoyed it very much. It was very good work.
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Oh this is so light hearted and whimsical. The careful detail that you adorned her with added so much to this piece. I love poems like this...they allow innocence to sink back into the heart of an adult even if only for a moment. Thanks for sharing!
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I love this! Oh it's so gorgeous, the imagery is just beautiful dances I love poems like this. And you used auburn for the hair and that's what they call my hair colour lol. This is so beautiful honey. Good luck in the contest
Shari
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This was very nice. The inagery just flowed right off the page. I love this fantasy. I wish I could be right inside of it. The diction and rhythm fit the piece perfectly. You are quite the word weaver. Great job.
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very nicely done
a very lovely piece of imagery here. There is enough detail to be able to clearly see the picture in your head but not so much that it over does it. It is a beautiful poem I truely enjoyed it. -
Fantasy Dream
WOW RASPBERRY! This is an Excellent Quality Write! I love it. I just happened to notice it in the feature box and thought I'd check it out since I was already sending you an IM. So glad I did, this is just a place that I would love to be if I could choose my own fantasy. Beautiful You Go Girl!!!!!!!!!
Your Friend,
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Perfect
I am impressed! This one of the best poem! I like how words flows, and perfect rhyme. Poem is full of great pictures. When I am adding my comment I am used to choose one part of poem. this time it was a very hard job for me. finally I make a decision, as follows:
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Ruby gems adorn her lips
As emerald belts hug her hips,
Lapis stones light her eyes,
As she dances beneath the sunset skies.
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Good Job!
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