i see it in the movies
her wonderfully shaped booty
pressin' on his shaft
as his lips graze her neck
her utter perfection
as he works an erection
he lays her on her back
in his king sized nest
it's so romantic
the girl is beautiful and caring
unlike anything i've found - i catch myself staring
it's overbearing
to think there's something like this out there
but it's not for me
no, it's not to be
i search
souls and skins
but i find no win-wins
only losing situations
girls claim they're concerned
but, lie and test my patience
others flirt around
but never want to get down
and toss your raw emotions
straight into the ground
i'm insanity-bound
i need a baby that can rock me
i feel like i'm about to jump
and nobody will stop me
Author notes
sorry...emo
Written June 14th, 2005
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it's all good
Damn,it's like that? Who you been hollerin' at? Anyways,that was a cool lil' piece you wrote...Hope you find someone for ya'... -
Loved the way this took off, and then went slow, then fast, slow, fast, slow ... really enjoyed that pace! nice job on the poem - im sure you'll find 'them' someday
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I'd love to tell you that I'm there for you. I'd love to say that you can come to me anytime and I'll make everything better. But I can't. I'm like, a million miles away - we're practically from different worlds. But I can tell you that I love this piece. So many girls - and people in general - really are like that. But, and this could just be my misplaced faith in the goodness of people, but I really do believe that there are good ones out there. And once you find one that's truely good, you'll be all set - because anybody who is will have no problem seeing how wonderful you are.
<3 Amy -
brilliance <3
very beautiful lith, i loved it , you did a great job hun.,
keep it up, loved it! cant wait to read more
Much Love and Respect
Ashes, aka ganja goddess aka gravedancer lol -
I saw the title and had to read this.
Life and relationships would be so much better if they were like they were in movies...especially porn. But we all got the people with the issues and imperfections to deal with--oh well.
I always liked your writing, I'm a sucker for flow and rhyme everytime. Nice.
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well I don't remb if I commented on this be4 so...umm.. yeah.. here I go....
Awesome write as usual... emotion, immagery, flow... its all there.
There is also a saying that this reminds me of..."if all my friend were to jump off a bridge"...(blah blah blah... I added that part) I wouldn't jump with em, I would already be at the bottom ready to catch them"...
Well I am lazy and hey... not all too coordinated so I will just set u up a trampoline.
I digress...but a very spiff write. -
hey lithy! you'll never guess who this is, i changed my name today, it twas time for a lil change. its shippo btw haha. great poem i totally haven't read any poems in a while, and yours was the 1st sinc a while ago, and it most defintally was the best pick as always your an amazingly amazing writer so great in fact its just so amazing how amazing you are haha so im not the most articulate of pople but you get what im sayin. i totally loved the poem, and im sure you'll find this girl you sem to be lookin for... ya know we all aren't total flirts who arn't worth shit. some of us are accually worth it love always torie
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wonderful,honest!!
lith,love will find you. a good girl is out there,just as lonely and in need of love,as you are. if you ever need to talk or anything at all,just im me,or email me,janny loves you so much you are such a talented poet,and such a sweet kind man. i am proud of you,and i know that God has a plan for you,to live,and love and grow,and become one heck of a fantastic fellow,that any girl would be grateful to have. the less you stress,the more it will all come into focus.i have no doubt in that. 
janis
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interesting. different. be them female or male, some people are difficult. good job with writing this. a nice flow to it. enjoyed the read.
BLu -
ooohhh....you can't be single? xx
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whoa i luv that.
Awesome but yours always are.
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Anathematized
bull shit... maybe all the girls youve encountered are... but some girls do care. hell i could rattle off at least a hundred... none your age but uhmmm... alot that r George's heh...
lithium
uhmmm... great poem, i liked it ALOT and you should never stop writing... because your good!!! wonderful...
-bexa-
Edited on Jun 20, 3:15 p.m. because ''. -
Go fuckin HOSTILE
You know that I'm always here I miss talkin to you on yahoo and the cam you could see me at least then.... don't ever jump I'm one chick that you can count on.... I'm sick of those stuck up bitches that Play you or spray you....... it gives us good ones a bad name..... *you now what I mean* then people like you that come around in life make everything seem better doesn't believe in love or really care to have a good realation ship with a caligirl.......................
(LIKE ME!!! LOL)
I've grown to like talking with you and been down since we haven't been chatting at all.... p3@ce out in a fattie... hit me back some time soon....
~kim -
awww
George, u needa stop..even tho u cussed me out a couple of times...i still got love for ya....anything u say will have me under a spell...becuz i luv u..i've been there for u too..
~Ya girl,
Courtney~ -
that was good. VERY good...but poor Georgie, you're not getting any action? I find that hard to imagine, love. ....but Jenn is right, why aren't you writing erotica, hun? Lots of love.
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Wow, urm....WOW!!! I think it's amazing!!!
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girls don't give a fuck about us dude, they don't. they're only concern is themselves, that's why they can so quickly dog us, or tell their friends if we're less than "perfect" in areas. to hell with love man, the word no longer exists.
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And who Is emo?
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HHHUUUUU YOu jerk!!!! I hope you dfont mean this, Oveously Avoicewithin loves you, and you know I do. Baby, what the hell, Well In anycase this was a great write, twisted shit,
The begining had me all hot and mushy and hey I was turned on.....alot. And the smack in the face it changed.
Awesome write , but how and why??? -
So that message fucked up. lol but anyway
I love you like crazy georgie.
And maybe this is rude and out of place
But the first part of this turned me on :|
You should write erotica.
lol.
I love you.
message me homefry.
I misss uuuu -
Id stop you.
Id throw myself over before I let you die.
You negro.
I love you like no other.
And youll always have me.
Until you dont want me anymore.
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Perfect
Some people are just afraid of having their hearts broken. Don't worry...you'll find that girl eventually. This was awesome. Bravo! Awesome job -
Aww sorry.. don't worry there is a girl for you, good luck in finding it ^_^Great work on this poem, nice image in the beginning, reminds me of something.
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