Here I am in the surroundings of the
Luscious Green Fern Forest.
I, for the life of me,
cannot begin to remember
what clever delight cast me into
this beautiful, dreamy, sanctum.
With flying creatures all around,
butterflies galore and two of the
most delicate birds making happy sounds.
~~~~But Wait~~~~
What is that shiny glow above?
We all know fairy-tales aren't true
but they create a dream of life anew.
I'm not dreaming, I'm wide awake
with 4 glittery glowing fairies
fluttering softly overhead.
Without Peter Pan or one Lost Boy to be found
Neverland, I knew in my heart, was no where around.
And there was no chance that I'd just left the ball.
How do I know? You're asking yourself?
No glass slipper on either foot.
Cinderella's out, no Prince in sight.
No one to kiss me, Sleeping Beauty's not right.
Snow White didn't have fairies
Instead she had dwarfs.
As I turned and noticed the pink cloud in the sky
I sat up in bed
OH DAMN I'M A GUY!
Author notes
My poem has no specific pattern. There is no intentional rhyming anywhere. So if it rhymes it is only because I felt it was a good fit with the pace of the poem.
Best of Luck to All.
Written June 14th, 2005
A contest entry
- In Your Eyes by Legend.
300 points, ended June 18, 2005, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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excelelnt
this was a very good poem.......exploring why some people may form opinion about persons....rhyme was truly not forved but evolving with the flow.loved this one. -
I love the ending... hehe... thanks for giving me the link to this! I'll permit you to enter it in my contest as a pre-write. Keep checking back to the contest.
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Thank You Queen...
I surprised myself with the ending...LOL! -
Thank You phatalvision...
I was truly excited about receiving my first trophy. -
I wasn't expecting the last line in a million years
Pretty cool
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enchanting
Hi Lee Ellen, I enjoyed this poem. It's very clever; loved the ending. Your first trophy? The first of many, I'm sure. -
Thank You Susan, I too have had more smiles since I wrote this poem and everyone has left wonderful messages. I hope all is well and it's nice to meet you too.
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excellent~
Klassy sent me the link to this
I needed so much to smile and smile I did
I loved the little punch line at the end hehehe
Cute cute cute and nice to meet ya also
Hugs
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Forsakentears
I'm so glad that this could make you smile on a day that you needed it. Your comment back put a smile on my face today too. Thank You.
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Ali,
Thank you so much for letting me know you enjoyed this. Keep
Lee Ellen -
Lol...This is a very sweet poem..it made me laugh and I needed that today. You're a very talented poet I loved reading this, very cute, love the layout. Good luck in the contest!
~Lana
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This is cute and funny, thanks for sharing . Good luck in the contest.
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Thank You for your reply. I'm okay with the fact that you wished the ending would have been different. And when I started writing it I had no idea that it was gonna go where it did...LOL!
Have a good one.
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Thank you, I have had more fun with this poem. I am so glad everyone has gotten a kick out of it.
Lee Ellen -
Hehehehe! It was a cool poem. Full of emotion and beauty throughout... well apart from the last line. I really enjoyed the poem but I personally think that the last line spoilt it a little. No offense. It was good though! I liked the thoughts and feelings you expressed throughout and especially all the fairy tale stories you managed to include. Good luck in the contest x
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So very wonderful!!
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Thank You BrokenAngel. I did change some things from the first writing, but I didn't even give a thought to enchanting sounds, wish I would have, wonderful idea. I may make that change after the contest. I don't think it would be fair to do it at this point.
Thank you for your comments
Lee Ellen -
Thank you so much Bonnie!! I ended up with a twist that I didn't even plan, it just worked itself in. I am thrilled that you liked it.
I also wanted to thank you for directing me to the emoticons page. You are an
. Thanks again Bonnie!!!!
Love and Hugs
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Thank you Eris,
I am so glad that everyone is at least smiling at the end. It makes me feel good that I have been able to make others smile with 2 little lines! Thank You Again. -
LOL I loved the ending. It was a interesting twist. I would add some vocab to this poem like instead of happy sounds maybe enchanting sounds? I really think you'll do great!
Hugs Nicci
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Fantastic
Oh, Lee Ellen, you had me all the way through and then doused the icy water! This is so well-written and I love the twist at the end. The imagery is fantastic; reminds me of where we live.
This is should exceptionally well in the contest, at least in my opinion it's worth gold!
Lots of love and hugs, b♥nnieQ 
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Lol, this made me laugh! Oh my gosh. I was not expecting the ending! I still can't stop laughing... You have my applause for this. Thank you. Cheers and best wishes in the contest!
Eris
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Thanks Mom, I think I get it from YOU!!!!!!!
hehehehehehehehehe
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Lee Ellen, you just made my day. I'm going to be laughing all afternoon. hehehe! Such a sweet poem...with a rude awakening.
Mom
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Thank You! Thank You!
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lol...cleverly delightful. A very unexpected turn of events...a most wonderful dream enchantment. Nicely done. I wish you well in the contest.
Sam
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Thank You Legend, I had fun writing it and I'm enjoying the feed back I'm getting. I wasn't to sure what to expect.
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Thank you Rebeka. I appreciate your comment and am glad that it made you smile.
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ShadowStalker,
I sure hope you can laugh at this with me 
I'm not a guy. I'm a 36 year old mother of two with a twisted sense of humor at times. I laughed all the way through the rest of your comment after I read that. Thanks for your comment though. -
OMG...that was a nice little twist to the end. I liked how you made a fariy tale seem so...not fairy taleish...if that makes sense. For a guy, you write wonderful fairy poems and I'm glad I got the chance to read this. I would hope you didn't consider yourself a princess according to the title...excellent job and I'm going to have some tough competition because I enterd the same contest....
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nice job on the surprise ending !! i love it, what a unique take on the image. your meter is pretty good too
this was refreshing and not at all what i was expecting when i clicked on it, got a smile out of me today. good luck! rebeka
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Lyriclover wow that hit me well below the belt never expected the last line,A different take than all other works, It will stand out, and who knows may just give you votes. I like it Good luck in the contest
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