Slit my wrists,
Scrape out my eyes from their sockets,
Make small lacerations through which I will bleed to death,
Kill me slowly,
Kill me quick,
Do what you like,
Do what you see fit.
Just don't leave me,
Because the heartbreak is more severe than that of death,
If you leave it will be too much for me.
So slit my wrists,
Scrape out my eyes from their sockets,
Make small lacerations through which I wil bleed to death,
Kill me slowly,
Kill me quick,
Do what you like,
Do what you see fit,
Just please please please don't leave me.
Author notes
Written June 14th, 2005
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I can definity see some raw emotion in this poem. I feel that the way you expressed it was a little too up-front with not enough imagery, but that's just my opinion. I like the repitition you did with the first and last stanza, it's a good technique for connection the beginning and end. Keep writing.
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baby you know i'm not leaving you i love you too much to ever hurt you that much. but great write. love you lots.
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Thank you for your comment I am glad you enjoyed reading my work.
~Chrissy aka Akasha Misery~ -
I can completly understand where you are comming from with this write. It's so hard when you love someone so much that you don't want them to leave you if you've messed up or if you just have a feeling that their about to leave you. Death comes so much easier then heart break. Sometimes heartbreak is to much to bare and you can't handle it, you'd much rather die. Your emotions in this writting was great and the flow was good also. The vivid imagery you used to tell him how he could kill you was also a great touch to this write. I hope to read more from you soon. Keep writing, -Heather
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