There I was,
Staring into a stare,
Her eyes were playful,
And as her lips began to motion a word,
I gently hushed her...
We had no use for language-
I lessened the space between us,
Slowly, softly, I pressed my lips onto hers...
Passionately we traded tongues-
My loves' taste made me only hungrier,
As I slid my fingers into her hair
I eased my mouth across her cheek,
Caressing her skin with my lips...
As I move myself down her neck
I lovingly rub the inside of her arm-
She combs her hands through my hair,
Then places them over my chest.
As she wishes i withdraw myself-
Almost instantly she leaves the couch...
I follow willingly into the bedroom-
Bedside our tongues entangle again,
I feel her smooth hands over my abs...
In one fluent motion she removes my shirt,
We are as close as perfection will allow-
My lips return, meeting her neck...
I slip my fingers beneath her blouse.
As she lay backward onto the bed
I pull it off over her head,
She has already undone her pants,
And she rushes them off quickly-
Her eyes speak to me,
And I can tell that she's ready,
But I hold my patience tight
And make her wait-
I ease myself onto the bed,
And as I lean over her beauty
I move my hand into her hair,
And begin to kiss her ear-
I capture the bottom of her ear lobe,
And savor her taste...
Again i walk my mouth down her face,
Teasing her lips as I love her chin,
And then travel sweetly down her neck...
I feel her breathing heavier,
As my face meets her chest,
She removes her lace bra,
But I go down further...
She breathes quicker, deeper-
I slow my pace even more...
A kiss, a breath, a kiss, a breath-
Like a predator hunting prey,
My lips circle her belly button,
And then gently care for it,
As a mother would a daughter...
Moments pass before I descend even more.
Author notes
This is not finished but i will post the res soon...Promise....lol
Thank you for any comments you may give...Good or bad....
Peace and Love all.
Written June 12th, 2005
A contest entry
- what kind of boyfriend would you be? by StarvingAuthor.
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I found it rather hard to relate with this poem. Maybe a change of personal pronoun would have altered the flow better. None the less this is a great poem with a lot of potential. I won’t comment to much as I’m running out of time for the judging date!! But overall I think this has the makings of a most wonderful poem.
Well done and thank you for entering the 2007 raven contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Moonlight raven
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very seductive and mysterious. the last half of the poem seems more edited than the rest, very nice job though. thanks for entering. ♥ in s a t ia b le
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Too sexy not to be hot
Wow, now that was an amazing poem. It felt like I was there. Whoa. Amazing.
-Sal -
That was really nice. I really felt as if you were trying to please her then to just rush and getr it over with.
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I read this again...just for the hell of it...
I love your words. -
this is wonderfully sinful!
i'm really torn on the line "As a mother would a daughter..."
it gets the message across well, but in a kind of gross way.
like the last thing i'd want to compare cunnilingus with would be the way my mom loves me.
other than that i love this poem. it's sensual and sweet without being too x-rated. great job.
Edited on Jul 17, 1:27 p.m. because 'used the wrong word.'. -
I'm writing you a new poem...
A poem for you...
This is just what i meant it to do....
to tease you....lol
Aw....I have a hang over....
It's not a bad one, but i'm not the kind that ever gets them...
Anyway, I hope you'll like the poem...
Peace and Love...
Matt -
Oh you are such a tease!!
Finish it, please!!!!!
Love,
Sierra -
This is a good write but i dont like the ending. Other then that great write.
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Amazing, absolutly amazing. Wonderful ... and very enjoyable if I do say so myself
. Ha. It is VERY sweet and very passionate. It flows SO well. Thanks for the great tale...can't wait for the next one!!!!
~Electra~
Edited on Mar 01, 5:13 p.m. because 'of a typo'. -
Umm wow this seems a little to erotica for my likein
And I don't feel talking about making love
Is "love"
So I'm not even really going to bother
Even sayin anything else about this
Other it it is beautiful in a way
but not for me!!
With love,
Poetic Goddess -
Thank you very much....I will finish it ASAP....
Hope to talk to ya later....
Peace and Love... -
Thank you for your comment...i reallly tried to keep the poem smooth as if i were to take reader to the bedroom, to make them feel as if they were watching every motion as it was being made... I don't usually write love poems, or erotic poetry so this poem is sorta special to me...an original so to speak.... Your input well appreciated...thank you again...
Peace and Love...
Matt -
Thank you....it's a slow, wait....Very Slow Process...lol...
I will finish it ASAP...and hope the rest is as well worded as it has been so far...
I hope to talk to ya later....
Peace and Love...
Matt -
u shoulda written more! lol
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this is great! it's really intense and great! YOU GOTTA FINISH IT SOON!! haha. can't wait.
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Well Written
Pasionate (sp?) lol, well anyway, I felt as if I were her. You kept the feeling intence. And realistic... awesome write. -
*claps* awesome matt! im so proud!
see your good at it! all you needed was insperation! *fans herself* man! this was good, cant wait to read the rest ! keep it up! TTYL
love,
Jessica
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