All i have to do is to sit here and stew over my life become brand new
My world is turning my mind is swirling
I'm become a woman and not wanting to go back to reality
My life is fragile my innocents is radical
what a way to start the day
a good day with out any massacre
This is the way to be out side of the lee way
the best is the rest the rest being the best
My life is not mine anymore
But something better then before
Don't hate on me cause I'm not at your door anymore
I must do it my way with my lee way
No more running for help
No more hiding from hell
This is it
It's time
Bring it on
Lets fucking rhyme
Author notes
I don't like to rhyme in my poetry but I thought I would give it a try what cha think?
Written June 12th, 2005
What did you think
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Excellent
Great poem. It was a fast pace. Wonderful job. Although the pace was fast, it didn't make it bad. It made it excellent. I agree, you do have talent! I hope that you will continue writing and have a wonderful day! -
WELL DONE
I would say the content is very positive and that you are writing as one who has decided that are going to take on whatever the wolrd is going to throw at you. It shows a determination and a guts driven emotion.
(YEH BRING IT ON! throw it at me I will throw it right back)
Thats the feeling it gives me.
One comment though. If I were you I'd spell check just to give your poem that special edge. Some of the words are your own special spelling and make it difficult to understand until you read the entire poem and get the context. This was a great read. I enjoyed it very much. -
Excellent write, says a lot of the power of being a woman, kinda like I am woman, hear me roar. Nice flow as previously stated. I liked it.
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I'll give it an 8+
This poem was excellent, I've read a lot of you other works and this one is a lot diffrent, but it's still just as great as all the rest. I loved the flow and I loved the end, great write, good job keep it up.
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