Each day as dusk approaches,
and nighttime settles in
You can hear the sound
of sweet romance,
on a tiny violin
He searches for his true love,
he plays into the night
At last, At last,
she hears his songs,
and answers to his plight
Play for me now;
my Romeo,
play for me
my true loves pet.
I’m the one
you’re searching for,
I’m you’re Juliet
He played for her
till night did end,
and twilight
let the morning in
He played for her,
love’s sweet surrender,
For this night was theirs
to forever remember
Author notes
option #3
A contest entry
- Romeo and Juliet Contest by misshugglebugglez.
626 points, ended November 23, 2008, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Contest by Blue-Rose Beauty.
490 points, ends December 11, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
What did you think
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Very well written
Nicely rhymed and well painted images. You avoided cliches. It was beautiful.
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Romantic
This is so romantic, I can hear him thrill the night and all who listens. Nice work and so romantic.
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TC
This is actually about crickets...tiny violin...plays into the night...Thank you so very much for taking so much time to read through my poetry. You are a dear friend and your support of my work is priceless.
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wow this was great... have you ever seen the movie August Rush? this reminds me of a scene in it =)
i thought this was wonderful. good luck in my contest, thanks for entering! hugs,
adria <3
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Thank you Adria, I haven't seen the movie but so glad you liked the poem.
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Another beautiful write that has such a tender feel.. think we all hope to find a love like this... love the flow and gentle rhyme... one small suggestion, 9th line change "songs" to read "song"..
enjoyed this as well
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Thank you for your thoughtfulness, I will make the changes...this was a fun poem to write and believe it or not it is about crickets..once again thank you
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Well then I wouldnt make the change... I see now how it relates to the crickets, but the way you have written it gives it a universal appeal, hope that makes sense...
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thank you again for your kind words and wisdom
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passionate and beautifully written
Once again, you show the so so wonderful talented lady that you are. This is a beautifully written poem that is so filled with passion and longing and sweet love. You just keeppppppppp doing this hun... You have a follower.... Hugsssss D... -
Gypsy
I thank you for your thoughtful comments. This was a fun poem to write and I hope there are more like this in me. It is different from the many other poems I have written. -
The whole piece gave a light tempo, tender and enchanting. The rhyme done very well, not forced. A very impressive piece indeed. Bravo! Blessings, Gypsy
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wow!!! that is really good!! I like how you brought in romeo and Juliet...youa re..amazing!! keep up writting!
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