Little worries, distant lives, caught with the blades, caught with the knives
all the blood, soon falls down, but you dont have to bother, seein me around
all the cuts, that show upon my wrists, i think back, wonderin why did i do this
then i remember, all the hurt and all the pain, no one should ever, remember my name
all the sorrow, thoughts so true, all the hatred, i had against you
all the lies, that you have told me, i just wanna die, i just wanna leave
bury my body, dont come to my grave, hide my remains, that you find the next day
but dont tell my parents, that their youngest daughter is gone, they probably wont realize, that im not at home
write a letter, to all of my friends, tell them im sorry, that i gave in
tell them not to worry, tell them not to cry, thats all I have to say, before i comit suicide
Author notes
Charoline is the devil.
Written June 10th, 2005
A contest entry
- The Darkness! (death, suicide, dark... you get the idea) by MassHysteriaX3.
300 points, ended July 19, 2005, 16 entries
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a friendly reminder!
don't forget to comment on carolines work too (twisted mind) best of luck in the contest!!!!
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great!
i love this poem!! i can really relate to it like i used to cut and then i would htink about it later and be like why would i do that. but i did it again later. i have quit now but i still think about it all the time, think about what if i did it again, and i try to think what thoughts were going through my mind. i really really really like this poem!!! great write!!! keep up the good work!!! great job!!! good luck in the contest!!!!
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Very good
I really liked this poem.. Umm, I really hope it was just to get it out of your system to though.. You are a really good writer.. adn you should use all fo your emotions and take advantage of your skill.. Great job. -
great write
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well this is definetely suicidal. i liked the rhyme scheme. it was perfect. this was really sad, Alissa.
i hope it was just to get it out of your system. it seems like you are your own worst enemy... keep on writing, Alissa... you write very well.
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this was amazing! and so sad
you could really feel your pain in this.
"but dont tell my parents, that their youngest daughter is gone, they probably wont realize, that im not at home"
^^^^ this was so sad! ... aaannnnddd HUGGG!!! great work!
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