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Eternal Darkness

living life in eternal darkness,
collides with my happiness,
knowing things aren't always what they appear to be,
because in reality, we see faces, not hearts,
this is where my problem starts.

people love and people kill,
people make me do things against my will,
but I'm through with this,
i want to find my eternal bliss,
everyone deserves to be happy,
even me, wouldn't you agree?
or am i wrong... am i supposed
to just play along?

to be continued...

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Written June 9th, 2005

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  • mysteryfriend
    June 23, 2005
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    come write on not cool now i have to wait


  • My Inner Soul
    June 10, 2005
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    off tha chain man!!

    awesome... the to be continued part makes me anxious for part two(if there's gonna be one)newayz great job!

  • Sky Prince Ireland gold member
    June 10, 2005
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    VERY GOOD

    Expressive!
    Everyone deserves happiness; I know there's happiness over the horizon for you in some way, shape or form.
    But more so it lies buried inside us. We just need to look inside ourselves and find it. As long as we make the effort, it's always possible. Thanks for sharing this.
    Great job!
    Brian