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You dont care (and u kno it)

I can tell you don't really care

 

you look right past me like i wasn't ever there

 

you with her just doesn't seem right

 

i think of you every single night

 

i'm crying inside, my hearts broken up

 

i'm still trying, i may as well give it up

 

you don't even know what I'm goin through

 

you never even knew how much I loved you

 

you look right past me like not even here

 

don't know even see a single tear

 

you're stuck on your self, but i don't care

 

you're in my mind, heart, soul, you're every where

 

the blood is slowly dripping, dripping off my wrists

 

my brain, focusing on counting the slits

 

one for your lies, another for my cries

 

three for you and her four for you and me

 

you and me werent ment to be

 

i am falling falling out of pain

 

the blood is flowing flowing like rain

 

my heart is pounding pounding so fast

 

my life no longer, no longer will it last

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Written June 9th, 2005

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  • SweetHazelEyes
    July 3, 2005
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    i liek that its very emotionly i liek it alot it hurts jst to read it. i kno wut ur goin throu.


  • Simply Loved
    June 10, 2005
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    Agreed with Jillian. Definitly a poem. But a good one.


  • Quiet Silence
    June 10, 2005
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    This is really good. To me it sounds more like a poem then a story but its all good. Great Job! Great Work! Great Poem/Story!