The deepest, blackest depths
holds a deeper shadow within
a lightless, twilit mark
on souls most stygian
the dismal, cheerless spectres,
shading the dour, dusky dim,
in this tenebrous sector
appear most acheronian
the night-lit saturine
darkness is darker than the darkest dark
DARK DARK DARK DARK DARK DARK!!!!!!!
DARK~~~!!!
DAAAARRRRKK!!!!!
Its REALLY dark down there!
Author notes
Written June 8th, 2005
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i really like the second stanza, this is a great piece of work, and i love the fact that the text is in black also... at least i am assuming it is because i had to higlight it against the black background to read it.
great work anyway
laurax -
very clever to use dark font on a dark background to represent 'dark'
the serious stanzas are good and you ended with a sense of humor
interesting write
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I hate to ask you this but did you make this whole page dark and the poem unreadable on purpose out of humor or did you somehow forget to highlight the lettering? Yes I can highlight the lettering but still it would be more convenient to read it without going through the trouble. But I'm sure whatever you've written about the dark is terrific. As an honor I shall give you applause.
Brian -
Erm, well now I could spam you on this one and you wouldn't know until you bothered changing the colors...but anyways...I'll make some suggestions just for the hell of it. Add more rhyme and seperate everything into stanzas! Keep up the great black screens!
happy writing!
Ben -
Hmmm dark indeed void.
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Hahaha. I really enjoyed this poem. I liked how you had to highlight it. it was very different
and i liked your use of wording, too.
The only thing that didnt go with this piece was the ending.
But other than that it was great.
Keep on writing
-Flo_<3 -
this was really cool, at first i didnt know how to read it, but then i highlighted the whole thing, neat effect, this is a really great write, keep up the great work , thanskf for entering, and good luck
manda
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lo, you really did have to highlight it....well, it was awesome....i loved it....nice job...keep up the good work...you are awesome......thanks for tellen me about the poem.....i enjoyed reading it...
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like its nice but I liked the pee poem better though keep the good work up though
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haha this poem kind of humored me. i thought it was very good except for the ending. the ending is doesn't flow while with the rest of the poem. you used an array of vocabulary though which i liked. keep up the great work!
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