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There is a girl crying,
and i don't know why,
mabey she is lying,
so i sigh.
I would like to know whats wrong,
for so long,
please tell me whats wrong,
i want to help,
i know you are hurting deep down,
even though when i act a clown,
to see you smile.
I can see strait through you,
there is something wrong,
i am here,
i am here,
tell me what is your fear.

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Written June 8th, 2005

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  • MissPumpkinKing
    June 16, 2005
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    hiya luke! bless this is such a cute poem for fi. shes my little sister and we tell each other everything, it really sweet you care! i thought this poem was really nice and showed fiona that she has got really decent friends and stuff so welldone.
    take care alex xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx


  • Neon Highway
    June 10, 2005
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    I havn't told anyone.... cept one person.... you have to know me well to understand


  • Fortune
    June 9, 2005
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    thanks for the advice

  • SixPennyGirl
    June 9, 2005
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    Well loook the whole idea of friendship is not to hav to justify yourself- everyoen doesnt tell evryone everything but friends are simple meant to give people space when they need it and not demand answers just understand

  • Momentaryhappiness
    June 9, 2005
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    i presume this is for fi

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