The Winds of Time.
A gentle breath of air whispers softly around the tree of life.
Young tree stands strong and proud, leaves of experience shivering gently in the breeze.
Grains of sand tossed high into the branches, to sprinkle the leaves of experience with pain.
Wind of time grows stronger with each day passing by.
Tree of life begins to bend, to shiver and shake in the winds.
Leaves of experience tear and shred with each strengthening gust that blows.
Twigs of emotion snap and break tossed high in the sky by the winds.
Skies darken and glower as rain spatters and falls.
The sky is black and the wind is strong, blasts from every side.
Tree struggles to stand tall and proud.
But tree weakens with leaves of experience tattered and torn.
Branches of love broken and jagged, life's blood begins to flow.
Wounds of life, love, memory can clearly now be seen.
Winds of time howl and roar, stronger and faster they blow.
There is no stopping now the winds of time; nature’s fury at last breaks free.
Human nature, of love and of caring, of hatred and anger, of pain and despair once freed, can never be leashed.
The winds of time dance freely over the now wounded and broken tree.
Raging and ravishing, rending and ripping, the tree begins to fall.
The winds of time blow gently through the branches of a once proud tree, lain fragile and broken on the ground.
No pride, no strength, no dignity, is seen in this shattered soul.
Yet there, in a quiet sheltered place on this beautiful but wounded tree.
A whisper of green and yellow, shimmering gently on the breeze.
A leaf, a tiny leaf, tenacious to the last.
Author notes
I did not have a good life as a child and my struggle was long and hard, but once I had my children I discovered what love really was. They gave me hope.
Written June 7th, 2005
A contest entry
- Mama's Family Welcome Home by peluche.
500 points, ended June 21, 2005, 5 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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What an amazing piece of imagery. This just moved right off the page!! It had some good sensory details in it and the word choice was good. A clever usage of nature to portray the struggle of life. Well done.
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Stunning, absolutely breathtaking. This was just an absolutely beautiful poem all the way around.
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The imagery on this was beautiful. You did a great job with that, and I'm glad things turned out. Good luck and thanks for entering.
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wow.. This is a very well written poem... It is definately what we were looking for...
Thank you for entering and good luck...
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Beth -
Thank you
Aran -
How wonderful this was; I'm terribly sorry that your childhood was a rough one, but I'm so happy things have turned around for both you and your children. This was a wonderful write; it was like a story told from the wisest in the village; such an inspiring write. Thanks for entering and joining the group.
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Jess -
wow, very romantic,almost keatsian work
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Human nature, of love and of caring, of hatred and anger, of pain and despair once freed, can never be leashed.
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Wonderful
very ver well crafted!
A wonderfully deep and descriptive piece of poetry!
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This is... so very deep. It describes nature and yet is talking about life.... like my old quote, "No matter how beautiful something is, everything wilts..."copyright© Death by Murder
Hmm, when I get the time I'll read more of your works....
Great write!!!
_Death_by_Murder_
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Enchanting, hopeful, wonderful!
OMG, what an incredible poem this is! It is amazing how you have used this tree to symbolize your life journey and the new growth to symbolize your offspring; which does indeed change the course of your life until you draw your final breath. I hope your life remains blessed
I am sorry, I cannot critique this piece. To do so would be a sin. I wouldn't touch it!
Kudos on a brilliant and beautiful piece of work!
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i liked your use of metaphors imagery and detail in this a lot...excellent write keep up the good work
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This was so touching! The imagery was supberb and your deep emotion was entrancing.
I love how you used a tree to signify so many things: time, an emotional journey, and rebirth.
What a touching tribute to those you love.
I wish you all the best.
Princess -
Captivating enchanting!!
Truly, captivating, enchanting... "A leaf, a tiny leaf, tenacious to the last." Nature, our teacher... she has nurtured your soul well and in the process you enlighten and delight others with her beauty Wishing you and yours much success in all of your endeavors
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Your use of metaphors, imagery, and detail in this was extrodinarily delightful. Keep up the great work!
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Thank you.
Aran -
Having children was a saving grace for me also. I could give the love that had lain dormant inside me for so many years. I can certainly understand your wonderful metaphor of the tree and what it means to you. A lovely poem indeed. Hugs, Patricia
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Thank you.
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great
This was really good, the detail was amazing and it kept you going until the end.Great write.
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